机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答表达了观点，但语言不够自然，句子结构混乱，且缺乏连贯的逻辑。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更准确的词汇，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: My favourite machine at home is my computer because it allows me to search the Internet and learn about topics that interest me. For example, I often use it to find information on various resources and stay updated with news.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，句子冗长且重复。建议使用简洁明了的句子，明确表达观点，并用连接词组织内容。

範例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are important because they save us time and effort. Instead of doing these chores by hand, machines help us finish faster, so we can focus on other activities.

建議: 回答表达了观点，但句子结构不够清晰，存在语法错误。建议使用更准确的时态和语法，简化句子，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because they provide detailed information. If I don't follow them correctly, the machine might not work properly. Therefore, instructions help me understand how to use the machine safely.

建議: 回答不完整且表达不清，句子结构混乱。建议完整表达观点，使用正确的语法和连接词，使回答更自然流畅。

範例: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because they provide detailed information about how to use the machine properly. After reading them, we can avoid mistakes and know what actions are not allowed.

× I can use my computer to search on the Internet and then I can know a lot of things, some kind of like I can know that the IO resources and also like the information that I interest in.

✓ I can use my computer to search on the Internet and then I can learn a lot of things, like the IO resources and also the information that I am interested in.

这里动词用法错误，'know' 应该用 'learn' 来表达学习新知识，'interest' 应该用现在分词形式 'am interested in' 来表示兴趣。

× Well, I believe that they are both important because even though those of the step, it can be done by our hands, but when they have the machine, when they are the machine, we can use that to do it and we can replace it and no need to and we can have time to do another things.

✓ Well, I believe that they are both important because even though some steps can be done by our hands, when we have the machines, we can use them to do it, and we can replace it and don't need to, so we can have time to do other things.

代词使用错误，'those of the step' 应改为 'some steps'，'they have the machine' 应改为 'we have the machines'，'when they are the machine' 语义不清，改为 'when we have the machines'，'another things' 应为 'other things'。

× Yes, for sure I will do that because I also think that is quite important. There are the instructions and it tell me everything from very detailed about the machine and if I do not, if I done wrongly, actually the machine cannot be work. Therefore I think with the instruction can help me to know the machine.

✓ Yes, for sure I will do that because I also think that it is quite important. There are instructions and they tell me everything in detail about the machine, and if I do not, if I do it wrongly, actually the machine cannot work. Therefore, I think the instructions can help me to understand the machine.

动词形式错误，'it tell' 应为 'they tell'，'if I done wrongly' 应为 'if I do it wrongly'，'cannot be work' 应为 'cannot work'，'with the instruction can help me to know the machine' 应改为 'the instructions can help me to understand the machine'。

× Yes, I think that's important because when we read the instruction, we can know more detail about that kind of things. And then when I after reading the instruction, we can know about how to use it or what the things that we cannot do if we do that, we.

✓ Yes, I think that's important because when we read the instructions, we can know more details about those kinds of things. And then after reading the instructions, we can know how to use it and what things we cannot do if we do that.

代词和名词复数形式错误，'instruction' 应为复数 'instructions'，'more detail' 应为 'more details'，'that kind of things' 应为 'those kinds of things'，句子结构不完整，需调整。