机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽고 주제에 맞지만, 문장이 다소 중복되고 구체적인 설명이 부족합니다. 예를 들어, 식기세척기가 어떻게 시간을 절약해 주는지 구체적으로 설명하면 더 좋습니다. 또한, 연결어를 사용하여 문장 간의 흐름을 부드럽게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: My favourite machine at home is the dishwasher because it saves me a lot of time and effort. For instance, instead of washing dishes by hand, I can simply load them into the machine and focus on other tasks. This convenience makes my daily routine much easier.

建議: 답변이 질문에 직접적으로 답하고 있으나, 문법 오류와 반복적인 표현이 있습니다. 또한, 구체적인 이유와 연결어 사용이 부족합니다. 문장을 더 명확하고 자연스럽게 만들기 위해 문법과 어휘를 다듬고, 구체적인 예시를 추가하는 것이 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help save time. Since we only have 24 hours a day, using these machines allows us to complete household chores more efficiently and focus on other activities.

建議: 답변이 명확하고 자연스럽지만, 문장 연결이 조금 더 부드러워질 수 있습니다. 또한, 자신의 전문성을 언급한 후 그 이유를 좀 더 구체적으로 설명하면 좋습니다.

範例: Actually, I don't usually read the instructions before using a machine because I am a mechanic and engineer. Therefore, I already understand how machines work and can operate them without guidance.

建議: 답변이 질문에 적절히 답하고 있으나, 문법과 표현이 다소 부자연스럽고 반복적입니다. 문장을 더 간결하고 명확하게 만들고, 연결어를 사용하여 논리적인 흐름을 강화하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I don't think reading instructions is very important for me because of my experience. However, for others, it is essential since they may not know how to operate the machine properly or fix errors that occur.

× washing machine is really important because it can save you at times.

✓ washing machines are really important because they can save you at times.

The subject 'washing machine' should be plural 'washing machines' to match the context of general machines, and the verb should agree in number. This is a singular and plural issue.

× We have only 24 hours in day in a day, but you know, washing dishes and cleaning takes a lot of time, so I prefer to use the machines.

✓ We have only 24 hours in a day, but you know, washing dishes and cleaning take a lot of time, so I prefer to use the machines.

The phrase 'in day in a day' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'in a day'. Also, 'washing dishes and cleaning' is a compound subject and should take the plural verb 'take' instead of 'takes'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× Well, for me reading instruction is not really important thing, but for the others it's quite important because they don't know how to handle it and secondly, they don't know how to cope with some errors.

✓ Well, for me reading instructions is not a really important thing, but for others it's quite important because they don't know how to handle it and secondly, they don't know how to cope with some errors.

The noun 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' when referring to general guidelines. Also, 'not really important thing' needs an article 'a' before 'really important thing'. 'The others' should be 'others' without 'the' when referring to people in general. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers and articles.