机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to directly state your favourite machine and explain why, using clear and complete sentences. Avoid redundancy and ensure your response is natural and easy to understand.

範例: My favourite machine at home is the microwave because it heats food quickly and saves me a lot of time when I'm busy.

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and clearer sentence structure. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important, especially for busy people, because they help save time and keep the house clean after a long day at work.

建議: Your answer repeats the same idea and has some grammatical errors. Try to give a concise and clear response with supporting reasons, avoiding repetition.

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine for the first time to avoid making mistakes and to use it safely.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and contains awkward phrasing. Make sure to complete your sentences and use appropriate vocabulary to explain your point clearly.

範例: Yes, it is very important to read the instructions before using a machine because it helps prevent accidents, such as electric shocks.

× Well I have many favorite machines in my home, however I choose one mine.

✓ Well, I have many favourite machines in my home; however, I choose one of mine.

The phrase 'one mine' is incorrect because it lacks the preposition 'of' to link 'one' and 'mine'. The correct phrase is 'one of mine' to indicate a single item belonging to the speaker. Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses properly.

× The other machines I would choose microwave because it works so fast and well in order to.

✓ Among the other machines, I would choose the microwave because it works quickly and well.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkwardly structured. 'The other machines I would choose microwave' lacks a preposition and article before 'microwave'. Also, 'in order to' is incomplete without an action following it. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects the structure.

× because it works so fast and well in order to.

✓ because it works so quickly and well.

The adverb 'fast' is acceptable but 'quickly' is more appropriate in formal contexts. Also, 'in order to' is incomplete and unnecessary here, so it is removed for clarity.

× washing machines and sweeping machines are so crucial for busy people because after a hard work they should clean the old rooms.

✓ Washing machines and sweeping machines are very crucial for busy people because after hard work they need to clean the old rooms.

The phrase 'after a hard work' is incorrect because 'work' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. Also, 'should clean' is awkward here; 'need to clean' better expresses necessity. 'So crucial' is acceptable but 'very crucial' is more natural.

× Well, if I had never used it before, yes of course I read the instructions before using a machine because it will be a new for me and in order not to make a mistake.

✓ Well, if I have never used it before, yes, of course I read the instructions before using a machine because it will be new to me and to avoid making mistakes.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the past perfect 'had never used' instead of present perfect 'have never used' to refer to experience up to now. 'A new' is incorrect; 'new' is an adjective and does not need 'a'. 'In order not to make a mistake' is better expressed as 'to avoid making mistakes' for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, it's so significant to read the instructions before we are using a machine because.

✓ Yes, it's very important to read the instructions before we use a machine because...

The phrase 'before we are using' is awkward; simple present 'before we use' is correct for habitual actions. 'So significant' is better replaced with 'very important' for naturalness. The sentence is incomplete but corrected as far as possible.

× Reading the instructions helps to avoid some bad accidents like the electric charges like that.

✓ Reading the instructions helps to avoid accidents such as electric shocks and similar hazards.

The phrase 'some bad accidents like the electric charges like that' is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Electric charges' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'electric shocks'. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and improves grammar and vocabulary.