机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Also, correct minor grammar mistakes for clarity.

範例: My favourite machine at home is the dishwasher because I live alone and find washing dishes boring. It helps me keep my kitchen clean easily and saves me time.

建議: Be more specific and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'I don't know exactly' and try to give a balanced opinion.

範例: I believe washing machines are very important because they clean clothes quickly and efficiently. Although I'm less familiar with sweeping machines, I think they also help keep homes tidy.

建議: Avoid repeating words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to explain your reason clearly and avoid informal phrases like 'these stuffs'.

範例: No, I usually don't read the instructions because my father works for a company that sells home appliances, so I am familiar with how to use them.

建議: Try to avoid repetition and improve grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and be more precise in your explanation.

範例: Yes, I think reading instructions is important because it helps people use machines correctly, preventing damage and making the process easier and faster.

× washing dishes it's so boring and I and I don't like it so I just put them on the dishwasher and clean it.

✓ washing dishes is so boring and I don't like it so I just put them in the dishwasher and let it clean them.

The phrase 'washing dishes it's so boring' is incorrect because 'washing dishes' as a subject should be followed by 'is' not 'it's'. Also, 'put them on the dishwasher and clean it' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in' for dishwasher and the machine cleans the dishes, so 'let it clean them' is better.

× I just put them on the dishwasher and clean it.

✓ I just put them in the dishwasher and let it clean them.

The correct preposition to use with 'dishwasher' is 'in' not 'on'. Also, the dishwasher cleans the dishes, so the sentence should reflect that by saying 'let it clean them'.

× washing machines are really helpful in the daily life and it helps people to clean everything they want and in the quick and easier way.

✓ washing machines are really helpful in daily life and they help people to clean everything they want in a quick and easy way.

The subject 'washing machines' is plural, so the verb should be 'help' not 'helps'. Also, 'in the quick and easier way' is incorrect; it should be 'in a quick and easy way' to correctly use adjectives and articles.

× my father works on the company that sell these stuffs, the home tools, and I know all of them how to use and I know them clearly.

✓ my father works at the company that sells these things, the home tools, and I know how to use all of them clearly.

The correct preposition is 'at' for working in a company, not 'on'. 'Sell' should be 'sells' to agree with singular 'company'. 'Stuffs' is incorrect; the correct plural is 'things'. The phrase 'I know all of them how to use' is awkward; it should be 'I know how to use all of them'.

× because because it's makes them to know how to use it without getting destroy it and it makes them to know how to use it easier and in a quick way.

✓ because it helps them to know how to use it without damaging it and makes it easier and quicker to use.

'It's makes' is incorrect; 'it helps' is better. 'Getting destroy it' is wrong; the correct form is 'damaging it'. Also, 'makes them to know' is incorrect; 'helps them to know' or 'makes it easier' is better. The phrase 'use it easier and in a quick way' should be 'makes it easier and quicker to use'.