机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中有一些词汇使用不准确，例如“free feeding machine”应为“favorite machine”，以及“stroll up my phone store”表达不清晰。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意语法和词汇的准确性。

範例: My favourite machine at home is my mobile phone because it is portable, so I can carry it anywhere and check information anytime. Moreover, it is an important source of entertainment, and I often browse the app store to find new applications.

建議: 回答内容较好，但可以增加连接词使句子更连贯，例如使用“because”或“therefore”。同时，细节可以更具体，比如说明节省时间和精力的具体方式。

範例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are essential in our daily life because they save a lot of time and effort. Without them, we would have to clean floors and wash clothes manually, which is very tiring and inefficient.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，如“set off and close the machines”应为“turn on and turn off the machines”，以及“point out some dangerous”应为“point out some dangers”。建议注意语法和表达的准确性。

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because they tell me how to turn it on and off properly. Moreover, the instructions warn about potential dangers so I can avoid accidents.

建議: 回答较好，但可以使用更多连接词使句子更流畅，例如“therefore”或“thus”。此外，可以增加具体例子来支持观点。

範例: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because they highlight potential hazards that could cause accidents. Therefore, by reading them carefully, we can avoid these dangers and use machines safely.

× My free feeding machine is my mobile phone because it is portable, so I could carry it anywhere and check information at any time.

✓ My favorite machine is my mobile phone because it is portable, so I can carry it anywhere and check information at any time.

free feeding machine 这个短语不符合语境，应使用 favorite machine（最喜欢的机器）。此外，could 表示过去或假设，句中应使用 can 表示现在能力。

× What's more, it's an important way to entertainment and I could stroll up my phone store.

✓ What's more, it's an important way to entertain myself and I can browse my phone's app store.

way to entertainment 结构不正确，应为 way to entertain myself（娱乐自己）。stroll up my phone store 也不合适，应为 browse my phone's app store（浏览手机应用商店）。

× Without these machines we may spend much time in cleaning floor and washing clothes, so it's a good way to save energy and time.

✓ Without these machines, we may spend much time cleaning floors and washing clothes, so it's a good way to save energy and time.

cleaning floor 中 floor 应为复数 floors，因为通常指多个房间的地板。

× Without these machines we may spend much time in cleaning floor and washing clothes, so it's a good way to save energy and time.

✓ Without these machines, we may spend much time cleaning floors and washing clothes, so it's a good way to save energy and time.

spend time 后不需要介词 in，直接加动名词形式。

× Yes, because the instructions help us to know how to set off and close the machines.

✓ Yes, because the instructions help us know how to turn on and turn off the machines.

help 后面不需要 to，且 set off 用法不当，应使用 turn on（打开）和 turn off（关闭）。

× What's more, they point out some dangerous so we could prevent from that.

✓ What's more, they point out some dangers so we can prevent them.

dangerous 是形容词，需用名词 dangers；prevent 后直接接宾语，不用介词 from。could 改为 can 表示现在能力。

× So if we read the instructions carefully, we may avoid this.

✓ So if we read the instructions carefully, we may avoid them.

avoid 后面应接复数名词 dangers 的代词 them，而不是 this。