机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ваш ответ немного длинный и содержит избыточные детали, такие как упоминание о семейном положении, что не обязательно для ответа. Старайтесь давать более прямой и связный ответ, используя связующие слова для логичности.

範例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because I use it almost every day, and it helps me save both time and energy.

建議: Ответ прерван и не завершён, что снижает его эффективность. Также стоит избегать обобщений, например, "женщина могла бы потерять больше энергии". Используйте полные предложения и более нейтральные выражения.

範例: Absolutely yes. Washing and sweeping machines are very important because they help people save energy and complete household chores more efficiently.

建議: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и незавершённые мысли. Следует использовать полные предложения и более точные выражения, чтобы ответ был понятен и логичен.

範例: It depends. If I am familiar with the machine, I usually don't read the instructions. However, if it is new to me, I always read the instructions carefully to avoid mistakes.

建議: Ответ содержит повторения и незавершённые предложения. Лучше использовать связующие слова и завершённые мысли для ясности и логичности.

範例: I think it depends on the situation. If someone knows how the machine works, reading instructions is not necessary, but if they are unfamiliar, it is important to read them.

× As a married woman, I want to say that washing machine is the most important item in my home and because I use it almost every day and it helps me to save time and energy as well.

✓ As a married woman, I want to say that the washing machine is the most important item in my home because I use it almost every day and it helps me to save time and energy as well.

The noun 'washing machine' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific item known to both speaker and listener. Omitting 'the' before singular, countable nouns in such contexts is incorrect.

× Absolutely yes. As I've just mentioned, washing machine was the best invention ever in my opinion and without these machines a woman could lose more energy and.

✓ Absolutely yes. As I've just mentioned, the washing machine was the best invention ever in my opinion and without these machines a woman could lose more energy.

The singular noun 'washing machine' needs the definite article 'the' to specify it. Also, the sentence was incomplete; the conjunction 'and' at the end is unnecessary and should be removed for clarity.

× It really depends. If I know about this machine in advance, wouldn't use any instructions. But if this is a new thing for me, I would exactly use instructions so that not to.

✓ It really depends. If I know about this machine in advance, I wouldn't use any instructions. But if this is a new thing for me, I would definitely use instructions so as not to make mistakes.

The modal verb 'wouldn't' requires a subject 'I' before it. The phrase 'would exactly use' is incorrect; 'would definitely use' is appropriate. The phrase 'so that not to' is incomplete and unclear; 'so as not to make mistakes' clarifies the purpose.

× I would say that it is not important and as I've just mentioned, it would depend on the situation. If a person knows how it works, it isn't important to to see some instructions, but you don't know about this thing, it would.

✓ I would say that it is not important and, as I've just mentioned, it depends on the situation. If a person knows how it works, it isn't important to read some instructions, but if you don't know about this thing, it would be important.

The phrase 'it would depend' should be 'it depends' to match the present tense context. The phrase 'to to see some instructions' contains a repeated 'to' and 'see' is incorrect; 'read' is appropriate. The last clause is incomplete; adding 'be important' completes the thought.