机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid filler words like 'I was saying' and unclear phrases such as 'very like usable.' Try to directly state your opinion and support it with clear reasons using linking words for coherence.

範例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves a lot of time, especially for families with children. Moreover, it is very convenient and easy to use.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and has some grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid vague phrases like 'do other tours.' Be specific and concise in your explanation.

範例: I think washing and sweeping machines are important for those who can afford them because they save time and effort. However, some families prefer traditional methods due to financial reasons.

建議: Your answer is clear but could be more fluent and natural. Avoid sentence fragments and improve sentence flow by combining ideas. Use linking words to explain reasons more smoothly.

範例: Definitely, I always read the instructions before using any machine because electronic devices require careful handling to ensure safety and avoid problems.

建議: Your answer repeats previous points and has fragmented sentences. Try to express your opinion clearly in one or two sentences, using linking words to connect ideas logically and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I believe reading instructions is very important to use machines correctly and prevent any damage or accidents.

× I was saying the washing machine is my favorite one in my home because that is a very like usable, especially that your families with children.

✓ I would say the washing machine is my favorite one in my home because it is very useful, especially for families with children.

The phrase 'very like usable' is incorrect; 'like' is misused here and 'usable' is less natural than 'useful' in this context. Also, 'that your families' should be 'for families'. The sentence is corrected to use appropriate adjectives and prepositions for clarity.

× I was saying the washing machine is my favorite one in my home because that is a very like usable, especially that your families with children.

✓ I would say the washing machine is my favorite one in my home because it is very useful, especially for families with children.

The pronoun 'that' is incorrectly used to refer to the washing machine; 'it' is the correct pronoun to refer to a singular noun previously mentioned.

× It saves a lot of time to do laundry and it's very convenient to use.

✓ It saves a lot of time when doing laundry and it's very convenient to use.

The phrase 'to do laundry' is grammatically acceptable but 'when doing laundry' is more natural and idiomatic in this context.

× It really depends on.

✓ It really depends.

The phrase 'depends on' requires an object to complete the meaning. Since no object is provided, 'depends' alone is correct here.

× Everybody, I would say it's not like important for everyone.

✓ I would say it's not important for everyone.

The word 'Everybody' is unnecessary and disrupts sentence flow. Also, 'not like important' is incorrect; 'not important' is correct.

× Because some families may not be able to afford them and they use the traditional methods like washing their hands and sweeping.

✓ Because some families may not be able to afford them and they use traditional methods like washing clothes by hand and sweeping.

The phrase 'washing their hands' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'washing clothes by hand' to refer to laundry. Also, 'the traditional methods' is better as 'traditional methods' without 'the'.

× But if someone can afford it, it's more convenient and saves time so that in the mean time you can do other tours.

✓ But if someone can afford it, it's more convenient and saves time so that in the meantime you can do other chores.

'In the mean time' should be 'in the meantime' as one word. 'Tours' is incorrect here; the intended word is likely 'chores'. Also, 'you' is acceptable but 'one' could be more formal.

× Definitely, I do read the instructions before using any machine.

✓ Definitely, I read the instructions before using any machine.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary here and can be omitted for smoother sentence flow.

× Because electronic things are. Quiet like we need to use them very correctly, ensuring the safety protocols and avoiding any mistakes.

✓ Because electronic devices are quite delicate, we need to use them carefully, ensuring safety protocols and avoiding any mistakes.

'Quiet like' is incorrect; it should be 'quite delicate' or similar. 'Very correctly' is unnatural; 'carefully' is better. 'Electronic things' is better expressed as 'electronic devices'.

× That can lead to a big problem.

✓ That can lead to big problems.

'A big problem' is acceptable but plural 'big problems' is more natural when referring to potential issues in general.

× I certainly do believe that reading instructions.

✓ I certainly do believe that reading instructions is important.

The sentence is incomplete; it lacks a main verb or complement after 'reading instructions' to complete the thought.

× Are far important.

✓ is very important.

'Are far important' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'is very important' to agree with the singular subject 'reading instructions'.

× Again, like the same thing as I mentioned earlier.

✓ Again, it's the same thing I mentioned earlier.

The original sentence is a fragment and awkward; it needs a subject and verb to be complete.

× To make sure that we use them correctly.

✓ We need to make sure that we use them correctly.

The original is a fragment; it needs a main clause to be a complete sentence.

× So that nothing wrong goes with them and to tackle them.

✓ So that nothing goes wrong with them and we can handle any issues.

'Nothing wrong goes with them' is incorrect word order; 'nothing goes wrong with them' is correct. 'To tackle them' is vague; 'we can handle any issues' is clearer.