机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use complete sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'It always work as a reliever for me,' you could say 'It always serves as a relief for me because it saves time.'

範例: My favourite machine at home is the vacuum cleaner. It makes cleaning very easy and convenient because I can clean my home quickly. Moreover, it serves as a relief for me since it saves a lot of time and effort.

建議: Your answer has several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. For example, you could say, 'Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are important because they help keep our homes clean, allowing us to focus better on work and studies.'

範例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are essential in modern life. They help people maintain a clean home efficiently, which in turn allows them to concentrate more on their careers and studies.

建議: Your answer is understandable but contains repetition and unclear phrases. Try to use complete sentences and link your ideas logically. For example, you could say, 'Yes, I always read the instructions before using any device because it helps me understand how it works and reduces the risk of accidents.'

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using any machine. This helps me understand how the device operates and reduces the chance of making mistakes or causing damage.

建議: Your answer covers good points but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use linking words like 'firstly' and 'secondly' correctly and complete your sentences. For example, you could say, 'I think it is very important to read instructions before using anything. Firstly, it reduces the risk of mistakes. Secondly, it helps you understand the item better and saves time by using it properly.'

範例: I believe reading instructions before using any device is essential. Firstly, it reduces the risk of errors or accidents. Secondly, it provides valuable information about the item, which helps save time by using it correctly.

× The favorite machine in my home is a vacuum.

✓ The favorite machine in my home is a vacuum cleaner.

The word 'vacuum' alone is ambiguous; 'vacuum cleaner' is the correct term for the machine used to clean floors. This clarifies the meaning and is the proper noun form.

× I can clean my home within second and.

✓ I can clean my home within seconds.

The word 'second' should be pluralized to 'seconds' because it refers to a short period of time, and the phrase 'within seconds' is the correct expression. Also, the conjunction 'and' at the end is unnecessary and should be removed.

× It always work as a reliever for me.

✓ It always works as a reliever for me.

The subject 'It' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'works' to agree in number and person.

× Is I think those are the important part of a personal life in this modern era becaused washing machines make people.

✓ I think those are an important part of personal life in this modern era because washing machines make people...

The sentence starts incorrectly with 'Is I think'; it should start with 'I think'. 'Important part' should be 'an important part' to include the article. 'Personal life' does not need 'a' before it. 'Becaused' is a misspelling of 'because'. The sentence is incomplete and needs to be finished properly.

× the stripping machine makes people home clean so that they can focus on their career, their studies in a better way.

✓ the sweeping machine makes people's homes clean so that they can focus on their careers and their studies in a better way.

The word 'stripping' is incorrect; it should be 'sweeping'. 'People home' should be possessive plural 'people's homes'. 'Career' should be plural 'careers' to match 'their'. Also, 'and' should be used to connect 'careers' and 'studies'.

× Yes I do. I prefer to read the instructions before using any instrument.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer to read the instructions before using any device.

While 'instrument' is not incorrect, 'device' or 'machine' is more appropriate in this context. Also, a comma after 'Yes' improves clarity.

× I think you reading the instruction is is good to know about the instrument how to how it work so that it also reduced the risk.

✓ I think reading the instructions is good to know how the instrument works so that it also reduces the risk.

'You reading' is incorrect; it should be 'reading'. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'How to how it work' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'how the instrument works'. 'Reduced' should be 'reduces' to agree with present tense.

× So that risk. Without risk.

✓ This reduces the risk. Without risk, accidents can be avoided.

The original sentences are fragments and unclear. They need to be combined or completed to form meaningful sentences.

× I think it is very important and essential if we read the instruction before using anything it.

✓ I think it is very important and essential to read the instructions before using anything.

The phrase 'if we read the instruction before using anything it' is incorrect and redundant. It should be simplified to 'to read the instructions before using anything'. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'.

× Firstly it reduced the risk of doing happening anything wrong.

✓ Firstly, it reduces the risk of anything going wrong.

'Reduced' should be 'reduces' to match present tense. 'Doing happening anything wrong' is incorrect; it should be 'anything going wrong'. Also, a comma after 'Firstly' improves readability.

× Secondly you can get more knowledge about the item.

✓ Secondly, you can gain more knowledge about the item.

A comma after 'Secondly' improves clarity. 'Get more knowledge' is less formal; 'gain more knowledge' is preferred.

× You can save your time if you know how its proper, how it work properly.

✓ You can save your time if you know how it works properly.

'Its proper' is incorrect; it should be 'it works properly'. The phrase 'how it work properly' should be 'how it works properly' to agree in number and tense.