机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to use correct grammar and sentence structure. For example, say 'my favorite machine is the refrigerator because it helps me keep my food fresh for a longer time.' Also, avoid redundancy and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

範例: My favourite machine at home is the refrigerator because it helps keep my food fresh for a longer time, especially during hot weather, which prevents spoilage.

建議: Use more precise vocabulary and avoid repetition. Instead of 'saves the wife' and 'saves that time of woman', say 'saves time for women'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Definitely, washing machines and sweeping machines are essential, especially for housewives, as they save time and help complete household chores quickly.

建議: Avoid repeating words like 'rather than rather than'. Also, use linking words like 'but' or 'however' to connect ideas. Try to make your sentences clearer and more natural.

範例: I usually try to operate a machine by myself without reading the instructions, but if it doesn't work properly, then I read the manual.

建議: Be careful with word choice and sentence structure. For example, 'reading manuals is very important because it helps prevent machine malfunction and saves time by ensuring the machine works properly.' Also, avoid fragmented sentences.

範例: Definitely, reading the manual is very important because it helps prevent the machine from malfunctioning and saves time by ensuring it works properly.

× In my home, my favorite machine is refrigerated 'cause it helped me to keep my food fresh for longer time and it is very essential especially in hot weather becauses it prevents my food from spoiling.

✓ In my home, my favorite machine is the refrigerator because it helps me to keep my food fresh for a longer time and it is very essential especially in hot weather because it prevents my food from spoiling.

The word 'refrigerated' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'refrigerator'. Also, 'helped' should be 'helps' to match present tense. 'Longer time' needs an article 'a' before it. 'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. These corrections fix singular/plural and verb tense issues.

× Definitely washing machines and stream machines are essential specially for housewives.

✓ Definitely washing machines and steam machines are essential especially for housewives.

The word 'stream' is incorrect; the correct word is 'steam'. Also, 'specially' should be 'especially' for correct adverb usage. This fixes a singular/plural and word choice issue.

× It saves the wife, it saves that time of woman and also do their work very fastly.

✓ They save the wife time and also help her do her work very quickly.

The pronouns and subject-verb agreement are incorrect. 'It' should be 'they' to refer to plural machines. 'That time of woman' is awkward; 'wife time' or 'her time' is better. 'Do their work' should be 'help her do her work'. 'Fastly' is not a word; 'quickly' is correct.

× Firstly, I want to operate a machine by myself rather than rather than read the instruction.

✓ Firstly, I want to operate a machine by myself rather than read the instructions.

The phrase 'rather than rather than' is repetitive; one 'rather than' is sufficient. Also, 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple steps.

× If the machine is not properly working, then I go to read the instruction.

✓ If the machine is not working properly, then I read the instructions.

The phrase 'go to read' is unnatural; simply 'read' is better. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. Also, 'not properly working' is better as 'not working properly' for correct adverb placement.

× Definitely leading man was is very important because it helps prevent the malfunctioning of the machine as well as it also save that time.

✓ Definitely reading the manual is very important because it helps prevent the malfunctioning of the machine as well as saves time.

The phrase 'leading man was' is incorrect; it should be 'reading the manual'. 'It also save' should be 'it also saves' to agree with singular subject. 'Save that time' is better as 'saves time'.

× By ensuring the machine work properly.

✓ This ensures the machine works properly.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. Changing it to 'This ensures the machine works properly' makes it a complete sentence with correct subject-verb agreement.