机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 중복된 내용이 포함되어 있습니다. 'frigerator'는 'refrigerator'로 수정해야 하며, 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한, 구체적인 기능이나 이유를 명확히 설명하는 것이 좋습니다.

範例: My favorite machine at home is the refrigerator because it is very quiet and has a modern design. It keeps my food fresh for a long time, which helps me reduce waste. I also like that it has special features like a quick-freeze function.

建議: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 'evil evolution'은 적절하지 않은 표현이며, 문장을 명확하고 논리적으로 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한, 구체적인 이유와 예시를 들어 답변을 풍부하게 만드는 것이 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important because they save me a lot of time and effort. Before having them, I had to wash clothes and clean the house manually, which was tiring. Now, these machines make my daily chores much easier.

建議: 답변이 혼란스럽고 문법적 오류가 많아 의사 전달이 어렵습니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 구성하며, 자신의 습관과 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I usually don't read the instructions before using a machine because I am a bit lazy. However, I know it's important to read them to use the machine correctly and avoid mistakes.

建議: 답변이 비교적 명확하지만, 몇몇 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 'motions'는 'machines'로 수정하고, 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다. 구체적인 이유를 더 추가하면 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions before using machines because they often have many functions that we might not know about. Reading the instructions helps us use the machines safely and effectively.

× My favorite machine in my home is the frigerator because it's quiet, knew and there is a lot of things inside.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is the refrigerator because it's quiet, new, and there are a lot of things inside.

The word 'knew' is a past tense verb and is incorrectly used here; the correct adjective is 'new'. Also, 'there is a lot of things' should be 'there are a lot of things' because 'things' is plural, requiring plural verb agreement.

× There are a lot of the things inside and it's really cool shape.

✓ There are a lot of things inside and it has a really cool shape.

The phrase 'a lot of the things' is incorrect; 'a lot of things' is correct. Also, 'it's really cool shape' is incorrect because 'shape' is a noun and needs a possessive verb; 'it has a really cool shape' is correct.

× And also the function is really special like.

✓ Also, the function is really special.

The sentence ends with 'like' which is incomplete and incorrect here. Removing 'like' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clear.

× Of course, they are really important it they changed my life.

✓ Of course, they are really important; they have changed my life.

The phrase 'it they changed my life' is incorrect. It should be 'they have changed my life' to correctly refer to the machines and use the present perfect tense.

× It's kind of evil evolution in my life.

✓ It's kind of a revolutionary change in my life.

The phrase 'evil evolution' is incorrect and does not convey the intended meaning. 'Revolutionary change' is a better expression to describe a significant positive change.

× In my house tour.

✓ In my house,

The phrase 'house tour' is incorrect in this context. The intended meaning is likely 'in my house,' so 'tour' should be removed.

× I don't need to spend time watch a lot of time.

✓ I don't need to spend a lot of time watching.

The phrase 'spend time watch' is incorrect; after 'spend time,' the verb should be in the -ing form, so 'watching' is correct.

× I don't need to spend a lot of time to do that instead of them.

✓ I don't need to spend a lot of time doing that because of them.

The phrase 'to do that instead of them' is awkward and incorrect. Using 'doing that because of them' clarifies that the machines save time.

× Actually I need to do that, but I really read the instruction before using them because I'm really lazy too.

✓ Actually, I need to do that, but I don't really read the instructions before using them because I'm really lazy too.

The sentence contradicts itself; 'I need to do that' but 'I really read' is incorrect. It should be 'I don't really read' to express the intended meaning.

× Actually I need to do that, but I really read the instruction before using them because I'm really lazy too.

✓ Actually, I need to do that, but I don't really read the instructions before using them because I'm really lazy too.

The word 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' because it refers to multiple guidelines.

× Do it.

✓ I don't do it.

The phrase 'Do it.' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'I don't' clarifies the meaning that the speaker does not read instructions.

× That's why I don't read it, but I think I need to read them for using correctly.

✓ That's why I don't read them, but I think I need to read them to use the machines correctly.

The pronoun 'it' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'instructions.' Also, 'for using correctly' is incorrect; 'to use ... correctly' is the correct form.

× As I mentioned, it's really important to read instructions before using the motions because we don't know how to use the and how many functions they have.

✓ As I mentioned, it's really important to read instructions before using the machines because we don't know how to use them and how many functions they have.

The word 'motions' is incorrect; it should be 'machines.' Also, 'how to use the' is incomplete; it should be 'how to use them'.

× That's why we need to learn before using them.

✓ That's why we need to learn before using them.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.