机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid repetition and incorrect word usage, such as confusing 'washing machine' with 'dishwasher'. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural. For example, instead of repeating 'every every time', say 'every time'.

範例: My favourite machine at home is definitely the dishwasher because it saves me a lot of time and energy. After every meal, I put the dirty dishes into the dishwasher, and it cleans them efficiently once I press start.

建議: Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear expressions. Use linking words like 'because' and 'besides' properly to connect ideas. Also, try to be more specific about how these machines help us.

範例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save us time and energy. After a long day at work, these machines help us clean our homes quickly, allowing us to relax more.

建議: Improve grammar by using singular/plural forms correctly and avoid awkward phrasing. Use linking words like 'because' to explain reasons clearly.

範例: Yes, absolutely. When I have a brand new machine that I am not familiar with, I always read the instructions before using it because it helps me understand how it works and avoid mistakes, ensuring it functions well.

建議: Work on sentence structure and grammar, such as 'instruction manual' instead of 'them instruction manual', and 'avoid mistakes' instead of 'avoid this modest mistakes'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: In my opinion, it is important to read the instruction manual because it helps us avoid mistakes and makes the machine last longer than expected. Besides, having knowledge about the instructions really helps when using the machine.

× I think that this was This is such a great invention because it helps me save my time a lot as well as my energy.

✓ I think that this is such a great invention because it helps me save a lot of my time as well as my energy.

The sentence incorrectly switches from past tense 'was' to present tense 'is' abruptly. Also, 'save my time a lot' is awkward; the correct form is 'save a lot of my time'. The present tense 'is' fits better here as the invention still exists and functions now.

× Every every time after meal I would put my dirty dishes in the washing machine and it would help me clean up immediately when I press start.

✓ Every time after a meal, I put my dirty dishes in the dishwasher and it helps me clean them immediately when I press start.

The phrase 'Every every time' is redundant; 'Every time' suffices. 'After meal' lacks an article; it should be 'after a meal'. 'Washing machine' is incorrect for dishes; it should be 'dishwasher'. Also, 'would put' and 'would help' suggest habitual past, but present tense is more appropriate here. 'Clean up' should be 'clean them' to specify dishes.

× Oh yes, of course I do think it is important. There are several reason why, but I think I mean reason why is important is because it helps us to save our energy and save our time.

✓ Oh yes, of course I do think it is important. There are several reasons why, but I think the main reason why it is important is because it helps us save our energy and time.

'Reason' should be plural 'reasons' when preceded by 'several'. 'I mean reason' is incorrect; it should be 'the main reason'. Also, 'helps us to save our energy and save our time' is redundant; 'helps us save our energy and time' is more natural.

× After a long day of work. At. At work. Besides it also. Makes us can relax more.

✓ After a long day of work, we can relax more. Besides, it also helps us relax.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'After a long day of work.' is a fragment and should be connected to the next idea. 'Makes us can relax more' is ungrammatical; it should be 'helps us relax' or 'allows us to relax more'.

× Having a brand new machines I am not familiar with, I would definitely read the instruction before using it.

✓ Having a brand new machine I am not familiar with, I would definitely read the instructions before using it.

'Machines' is plural but 'a' indicates singular; it should be 'machine'. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as manuals usually contain multiple instructions.

× This is because it helps me to understand how it works and what mistakes I should avoid all the time so that it can function well.

✓ This is because it helps me understand how it works and what mistakes I should avoid all the time so that it can function well.

The phrase 'helps me to understand' is correct but 'helps me understand' is more natural and common in English. No definite article error here, but the sentence can be improved by removing 'to'.

× In my opinion, it is important to read them instruction manual.

✓ In my opinion, it is important to read the instruction manual.

'Them' is incorrect here; the correct article is 'the' before 'instruction manual'. Also, 'instruction manual' is singular, so 'them' (plural pronoun) is wrong.

× This is because we can avoid this modest mistakes and keep our machine last longer than it supposed to last.

✓ This is because we can avoid these modest mistakes and keep our machine lasting longer than it is supposed to last.

'This' should be 'these' to agree with plural 'mistakes'. 'Keep our machine last longer' is incorrect; it should be 'keep our machine lasting longer' or 'make our machine last longer'. Also, 'than it supposed to last' is missing 'is'.

× Besides having a instruction knowledge. Can really help us when we are using it.

✓ Besides, having instruction knowledge can really help us when we are using it.

The original sentences are fragmented. 'Besides having a instruction knowledge.' is a fragment and should be combined with the next sentence. Also, 'a instruction knowledge' is incorrect; 'instruction knowledge' is uncountable and does not need 'a'.