机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇表达观点。可以先直接回答问题，然后用一两句具体说明原因。

範例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because I use it frequently. It saves me a lot of time and helps keep my clothes clean efficiently.

建議: 回答内容混乱且语法错误较多，建议先明确表达观点，再用简洁的句子说明原因，避免使用不相关或错误的词汇。

範例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save us time and effort. This allows us to focus on other activities like studying or spending time with friends.

建議: 回答中有语法和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用简单明了的句子表达观点，并说明原因，避免重复和无关内容。

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me avoid mistakes and prevents the machine from getting damaged.

建議: 回答中存在词汇使用错误和语法问题，建议使用准确的词汇表达观点，并用简洁的句子说明原因。

範例: Yes, I think reading instructions is very important because it ensures that we use the machine correctly and avoid damaging it.

× I I would say most frequent machine I use in my home.

✓ I would say the most frequent machine I use in my home.

这里缺少了定冠词“the”，并且“most frequent machine”前应加定冠词，表示特指。

× It's a very convenience home on domestic obvious and I can use it to save my washing time.

✓ It's a very convenient home appliance and I can use it to save my washing time.

“convenience”是名词，形容词应为“convenient”；“home on domestic obvious”语序和用词错误，应改为“home appliance”。

× They also so it's very convenient.

✓ It is also very convenient.

前文指的是单数“washing machine”，此处用复数“they”不合适，应使用单数“it”。

× It's very useful to make the occurrence more clean.

✓ It's very useful to make the clothes cleaner.

“occurrence”用词错误，应为“clothes”；“more clean”应改为比较级“cleaner”。

× I would say there in sanctuary in daily life washing machine is working machines are really is as problem cream works so that we can have more friends more time to do something else like from his friends or finish our study or working issues.

✓ I would say there is a sanctuary in daily life. Washing machines are really a problem solver so that we can have more free time to do something else like spend time with friends or finish our study or work.

句子结构混乱，缺少谓语动词，且“there in sanctuary”应为“there is a sanctuary”；“working machines are really is as problem cream works”语法错误，需改为“washing machines are really a problem solver”；“friends”误写为“friends more time”，应为“free time”；“from his friends”应为“spend time with friends”。

× So it's played it safe they're very important part in our.

✓ So it's safe to say they're a very important part of our lives.

“played it safe”用法错误，应为“safe to say”；“part in our”不完整，应为“part of our lives”。

× I'm definitely I would say reading the instructions and follow it then are very important because they can avoid due to wrongly using machine and otherwise you may broke it.

✓ I'm definitely sure that reading the instructions and following them is very important because it can help avoid damage caused by using the machine incorrectly, otherwise you may break it.

“would say”与“definitely”重复表达；“follow it then are”语法错误，应为“following them is”；“broke”应为动词原形“break”；句子结构需调整使其通顺。

× So I would say it's a must for me to read the instructions and not very good ads on that deal with machine so.

✓ So I would say it's a must for me to read the instructions and not rely on bad advice when dealing with machines.

“not very good ads on that deal with machine”表达不清，应改为“not rely on bad advice when dealing with machines”。

× Oh I would say it's very sensual because instructions can make sure a deal with the machine, the order advances correctly so that you can avoid to damage its due to incorrect operation.

✓ Oh I would say it's very essential because instructions can ensure dealing with the machine in the correct order so that you can avoid damaging it due to incorrect operation.

“sensual”用词错误，应为“essential”；“make sure a deal with the machine, the order advances correctly”表达不通顺，应改为“ensure dealing with the machine in the correct order”；“avoid to damage its”应为“avoid damaging it”。

× Also it's super necessary for me to read the instructions.

✓ Also, it's very necessary for me to read the instructions.

“super necessary”口语化且不正式，改为“very necessary”更合适。