机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答不够连贯，语法和表达有错误，且内容重复。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

範例: My favourite machine at home is the computer because it helps me solve problems quickly and allows me to enjoy high-quality video games.

建議: 回答不清晰，语法错误较多，表达含糊。建议直接回答问题，并用具体理由支持观点。

範例: Yes, washing and sweeping machines are important because they save time and effort in household chores, making life easier.

建議: 回答含糊且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议直接说明是否阅读说明书，并给出具体原因。

範例: I don't always read the instructions because some machines are easy to use, but if a machine is complicated, I will read the manual carefully.

建議: 回答表达不够流畅，语法和用词有误。建议用连贯的句子表达观点，并说明原因。

範例: Yes, I think reading instructions is important because machines are expensive, and using them incorrectly can cause damage and financial loss.

× That must be the computer which can be very fast to solve some problems and it can make me play computer games with our high quality video.

✓ That must be the computer which can be very fast at solving some problems and it can let me play computer games with high quality video.

动词后面接不定式to solve不正确，应该用动名词形式solving表示动作的进行或能力。并且表达“使我玩游戏”用make me play不太合适，改为let me play更自然。

× And. I think he's very good.

✓ And I think it's very good.

这里指代的是电脑，应该用it而不是he。

× Absolutely we can start to them to most of things that could only be done in the past, but it will be already rely on to me might come lazy bones.

✓ Absolutely, we can start using them for most things that could only be done in the past, but it might make me become lazy.

短语结构混乱，start后应接动名词using，for表示用途，rely on用法错误，且句子不通顺，改为make me become lazy更符合表达。

× Not necessarily. If a machine is not user friendly to reading instructions, it's a nice 30.

✓ Not necessarily. If a machine is not user friendly for reading instructions, it's not nice.

user friendly后应接介词for表示对某事物友好，原句中to reading不正确，且nice 30无意义，改为not nice更合理。

× Otherwise you might simply fiddle around with random, but if everything is handled then I will use its gentle way.

✓ Otherwise, you might simply fiddle around randomly, but if everything is handled properly, then I will use it gently.

random用作副词应为randomly，句子结构不完整且表达不清，改为handled properly和use it gently更符合语法和表达习惯。

× Sure, I think it's important to read the instructions be 'cause there are many. Machines are very expensive if we use them in. Faulty way it will. Make all make us money loss.

✓ Sure, I think it's important to read the instructions because there are many machines that are very expensive. If we use them in a faulty way, it will cause us to lose money.

because拼写错误，句子断裂且标点使用错误，in后应接a faulty way，money loss表达不正确，改为lose money更自然。