机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答不够连贯，语法和表达存在错误，且内容重复。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免冗余，并注意语法正确。

範例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time and effort. Since I have it, I don't need to wash clothes by hand, which is very convenient.

建議: 回答中表达不够清晰，语法和用词有误。建议使用更准确的词汇和句子结构，表达观点时逻辑更清楚。

範例: Yes, I think washing and sweeping machines are very important because they help save time. With these machines, I can finish household chores quickly and focus on other important tasks.

建議: 回答不完整且语法混乱，表达不清。建议用完整句子表达条件和观点，注意语法和连贯性。

範例: It depends on the machine. If it is simple, I usually don't read the instructions. But if it is complicated, I always read the manual carefully before using it.

建議: 表达不够准确，存在语法错误和用词不当。建议用更准确的表达说明重要性，并举例支持观点。

範例: Yes, I believe reading instructions is very important because it helps you use the machine correctly and avoid mistakes. For example, when I used a new washing machine, reading the manual helped me understand its functions better.

× Oh, maybe the wash machine with you know I am lazy boy so every time my mother asked me to watch wash the dishes I hide it.

✓ Oh, maybe the washing machine because you know I am a lazy boy, so every time my mother asked me to wash the dishes I avoided it.

这里“wash machine”应为“washing machine”，表示洗衣机，且“dishes”是复数，动词“wash”前应加“to”或改为动名词形式。句中缺少冠词“a”修饰“lazy boy”。此外，“watch wash the dishes”表达错误，应为“wash the dishes”。

× every time my mother asked me to watch wash the dishes I hide it.

✓ every time my mother asked me to wash the dishes I hid it.

句中“hide”应使用过去式“hid”，因为前半句是过去时态“asked”，动作应保持时态一致。

× But since I have the marsh wash machine I don't need to do it in person and it has it.

✓ But since I have the washing machine, I don't need to do it in person and it does it for me.

“marsh wash machine”应为“washing machine”，且“it has it”表达不清，应改为“it does it for me”表示机器帮我完成任务。

× Well, absolutely, because now I have wash and busy schedule to do so many things.

✓ Well, absolutely, because now I have a wash and busy schedule to do so many things.

“wash and busy schedule”中缺少冠词“a”，且“wash”用法不当，应为“a busy schedule”。

× So if we had this, these machines, we can just use it to do every trivial things in my life and I can focus on other tasks.

✓ So if we had these machines, we could just use them to do every trivial thing in my life and I can focus on other tasks.

“this, these machines”表达混乱，应统一为“these machines”；“use it”应改为“use them”与复数“machines”一致；“every trivial things”应为“every trivial thing”，因为“every”后接单数名词。

× So if we had this, these machines, we can just use it to do every trivial things in my life and I can focus on other tasks.

✓ So if we had these machines, we could just use them to do every trivial thing in my life and I can focus on other tasks.

条件句中使用过去时态“had”，主句应使用“could”表示虚拟语气，而非“can”。

× It depends if the machine is so simple and I won't read the instructions and just.

✓ It depends; if the machine is simple, I won't read the instructions and just use it.

句子结构不完整，“and just”后缺少动词，需补充完整表达。

× But if the machine is some things and very. Difficult to deal with.

✓ But if the machine is complicated and very difficult to deal with.

“some things”用法错误，应改为“complicated”或“complex”形容机器难以操作；句中“very.”后断句不当，应连贯表达。

× If you don't read the instructions, you can't better use it.

✓ If you don't read the instructions, you can't use it better.

“can't better use it”语序错误，副词“better”应放在动词“use”之后。

× And sometimes maybe you will message up, for instance for the first one.

✓ And sometimes maybe you will mess up, for instance, the first time.

“message up”是错误表达，应为“mess up”表示搞砸；“for the first one”应为“for the first time”表示第一次。