机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문장이 완성되지 않은 부분이 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 완전하게 구성하고, 중복되는 표현을 피하며, 구체적인 이유를 덧붙여 답변을 풍부하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: My favorite machine at home is the air conditioner, especially during the hot summer months. It helps me stay cool and comfortable when the temperature outside is very high. Without it, I would feel exhausted and unable to relax.

建議: 답변이 문법적으로 부자연스럽고 문장이 단절되어 있습니다. 문장을 완성하고, 연결어를 사용하여 논리적으로 답변을 구성하며, 구체적인 이유를 명확히 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they make household chores much easier and faster. For example, the washing machine saves me a lot of time compared to washing clothes by hand.

建議: 답변이 중복되고 문장이 명확하지 않습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하며, 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Actually, I usually don't read the instructions before using a machine because I prefer to figure out how it works by myself. However, if the machine seems complicated, I might read the manual to avoid mistakes.

建議: 답변이 문법적으로 부자연스럽고 문장이 완성되지 않았습니다. 조건을 명확히 제시하고, 연결어를 사용하여 논리적으로 답변을 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I think it depends on the situation. If I am confident about installing a machine, like a sweeping machine, I don't read the instructions. But if I am unsure, I always read the manual to make sure I do it correctly.

× I feel exhausted because the outside is really hot so I want to be. Cool cool though. So I.

✓ I feel exhausted because it is really hot outside, so I want to be cool.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper sentence structure. The phrase 'so I want to be. Cool cool though. So I.' is incomplete and unclear. Combining the ideas into a complete sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think they're really important because using such washing machines and sweeping machines. Is really. Convenient for me. Because it. They help me. To do the inside.

✓ I think they're really important because using washing machines and sweeping machines is really convenient for me since they help me do the housework inside.

The original sentence is fragmented with multiple incomplete sentences. Phrases like 'using such washing machines and sweeping machines. Is really. Convenient for me.' are broken and unclear. Combining these fragments into a coherent sentence improves readability and grammatical correctness.

× Because it. They help me. To do the inside.

✓ Because they help me do the housework inside.

The pronouns 'it' and 'they' are incorrectly used together causing confusion. 'They' correctly refers to 'washing machines and sweeping machines'. Also, 'to do the inside' is vague; specifying 'housework inside' clarifies the meaning.

× Actually I don't read the the introduction because. I think. It will be better to do myself. The whole thing so I don't read the introduction.

✓ Actually, I don't read the instructions because I think it is better to do everything myself, so I don't read the instructions.

The word 'introduction' is incorrect here; it should be 'instructions'. Also, the sentence is fragmented and repetitive. Combining the ideas into a complete sentence and correcting the noun improves clarity and grammar.

× When I have complete confidence too. Install the machine such as sweep. Machine. An it is OK too. To myself without reading instructions but.

✓ When I have complete confidence to install machines such as a sweeping machine, it is okay for me to do it myself without reading the instructions.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains incorrect pronoun and article usage. 'Sweep. Machine.' should be 'sweeping machine'. 'An it is OK too.' is unclear and should be rephrased. Combining the fragments into a coherent sentence improves understanding and grammar.