机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, ví dụ như 'harsh water' thay vì 'hot water', và câu trả lời hơi dài và lặp lại. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ phù hợp hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

範例: My favourite machine at home is the electric water heater because it provides hot water quickly, which is very important during cold winter months. I usually use it twice a day, once in the morning and once in the evening. I can't imagine living without it, especially when the weather is freezing.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp số nhiều và chia động từ đúng, ví dụ 'washing machines' thay vì 'washing machine'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời cần mạch lạc hơn, sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh câu ngắt quãng. Hãy cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể và rõ ràng hơn để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục.

範例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in our daily lives because they help keep our homes clean and save a lot of time. For example, instead of spending hours cleaning, people can finish the work quickly and have more time to relax or enjoy hobbies.

建議: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác như 'machine' thay vì 'mercy in', và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và giải thích lý do một cách mạch lạc.

範例: Yes, I often read the instructions before using a machine. Understanding the instructions clearly helps the machine last longer and ensures my safety. Therefore, it is essential to read the instructions before using a new machine.

建議: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và chính tả, ví dụ 'following instructions' thay vì 'follows instruction', và 'machines last longer' thay vì 'Maximus in last longer'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và tránh lỗi để truyền đạt ý hiệu quả hơn.

範例: Yes, of course, following the instructions of a machine is very important because it helps me understand how to operate it properly and safely. Following instructions can prevent accidents and help machines last longer.

× My favorite machine in my home is the electric water heater because is provide harsh water quickly which is very important especially during the cold winter months.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is the electric water heater because it provides hot water quickly which is very important especially during the cold winter months.

The verb 'provide' should be in the third person singular present tense 'provides' to agree with the singular subject 'it' (the electric water heater). Also, 'harsh water' is incorrect; the correct term is 'hot water'. The pronoun 'is' is missing before 'provide', so 'it provides' is correct.

× I usually use it twice a day for thinking, but one is the morning in on in the evening.

✓ I usually use it twice a day for bathing, once in the morning and once in the evening.

The phrase 'for thinking' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'for bathing'. Also, 'one is the morning in on in the evening' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. It should be 'once in the morning and once in the evening' to indicate frequency and time.

× I cannot imagine living without his, especially when the weather is freezing.

✓ I cannot imagine living without it, especially when the weather is freezing.

The pronoun 'his' is incorrect when referring to an object (the water heater). The correct pronoun is 'it' for inanimate objects.

× Yes, I think washing machine and sweeping machine are very important in our daily life since they help people keep their homes, cleans easily and save a lot of time.

✓ Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in our daily life since they help people keep their homes clean easily and save a lot of time.

The nouns 'washing machine' and 'sweeping machine' should be plural ('washing machines' and 'sweeping machines') because the sentence refers to them generally. Also, 'cleans' should be 'clean' to correctly modify 'homes'.

× We can be used for relaxing or doing other activities like hobbies.

✓ They can be used for relaxing or doing other activities like hobbies.

The pronoun 'We' is incorrect here because the subject refers to machines, not people. The correct pronoun is 'They'.

× For example. Instead of spending hours cleaning, people can finish the work quickly and have more time.

✓ For example, instead of spending hours cleaning, people can finish the work quickly and have more time.

The period after 'For example' should be a comma to connect the sentence properly. 'For example' is an introductory phrase and should be followed by a comma.

× Yes, I often read the introduction before using a mercy in scene.

✓ Yes, I often read the instructions before using a machine.

'Mercy in scene' is a mishearing or typo for 'machine'. Also, 'introduction' should be 'instructions' when referring to guidance for using a machine.

× Understanding clearly instruction when using a mercy in can help they more durable in ensure my safety.

✓ Understanding instructions clearly when using a machine can help make it more durable and ensure my safety.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions'; 'mercy in' should be 'machine'; 'help they more durable' is incorrect, it should be 'help make it more durable'; 'in ensure' should be 'and ensure'.

× So is it essential to wrist injection before using a new machine?

✓ So it is essential to read instructions before using a new machine.

The phrase 'wrist injection' is incorrect and likely a mishearing of 'read instructions'. The sentence structure is also incorrect; it should be a statement, not a question.

× Yes, of course follows instruction of a machine is very important because it helps me understand how to operate it properly an instrument safety.

✓ Yes, of course following instructions of a machine is very important because it helps me understand how to operate it properly and ensure safety.

'Follows instruction' should be 'following instructions' to use the gerund form correctly. 'An instrument safety' is incorrect; it should be 'and ensure safety'.

× Follows in Justin can prevent accidents and Maximus in last longer.

✓ Following instructions can prevent accidents and maximize its lifespan.

'Follows in Justin' is a mishearing of 'following instructions'. 'Maximus in last longer' should be 'maximize its lifespan' or 'make it last longer'.