耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I often try to understand different situations carefully. For example, when dealing with difficult people, I remain calm and listen to their concerns before reacting.

建議: Your response is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence and provide specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: I feel impatient when I am angry because my emotions take over. For instance, if someone interrupts me while I am working, I find it hard to stay calm, although I try to control myself.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: When I have to do something for a long time, I sometimes feel bored and tired. However, I try to stay focused by taking short breaks, which helps me remain patient and complete the task.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but contains hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Try to speak more fluently and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

範例: Yes, my job as a housewife requires a lot of patience. For example, managing household chores and taking care of family members can be challenging, so I always try to stay calm to maintain a peaceful environment.

建議: Your response is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Provide a clear comparison between past and present, and use specific examples to support your answer.

範例: I am more patient now than when I was a child. In the past, I used to get frustrated easily, but now I understand the importance of patience, especially when studying or working on difficult tasks.

× Transparent because as a girl I always need to be patient and I always need to understand the circumstance about every every situation and I need to always be.

✓ I am patient because, as a girl, I always need to be patient and understand the circumstances of every situation, and I always need to be so.

The original sentence uses 'Transparent' incorrectly as an adjective here; it does not fit the context. Also, 'circumstance about every every situation' is awkward and redundant. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects the adjective misuse.

× When I am angry, move my patient go and I feel very impo, impatient and that circumstance and I always try to be calm down but I can't and that's the bad thing about me.

✓ When I am angry, my patience moves away and I feel very impatient in that circumstance. I always try to calm down, but I can't, and that's the bad thing about me.

The phrase 'move my patient go' is incorrect and unclear. 'Patient' should be 'patience' (a noun), and the sentence structure is confusing. Also, 'impo' seems to be a typo for 'impatient'. The correction fixes pronoun and noun usage and clarifies the sentence.

× As a autonomous person I always choose a shortcut or, but when sometime some work take a long time, I feel sometimes very tedious and I keep to try calm down and.

✓ As an autonomous person, I always choose a shortcut, but when some work takes a long time, I sometimes feel very bored and keep trying to calm down.

The article 'a' before 'autonomous' is incorrect; it should be 'an'. 'Some work take' should be 'some work takes' to agree with singular 'work'. 'Tedious' is an adjective describing something boring; here, 'feel tedious' is incorrect, so 'feel very bored' is better. The sentence structure is also improved.

× Uh, obviously, uh, as a housewife, I always means to be a patient because when I feel angry or I feel impatient, everyone will affect with my behaviours and I need to always be calm down. I shouldn't be able.

✓ Uh, obviously, as a housewife, I always mean to be patient because when I feel angry or impatient, everyone is affected by my behavior, and I need to always stay calm. I shouldn't lose control.

'Means' should be 'mean' to agree with the subject 'I'. 'Be a patient' is incorrect; 'patient' is an adjective here, so no article is needed. 'Everyone will affect with my behaviours' is incorrect; it should be 'everyone is affected by my behavior'. 'Be calm down' is incorrect; 'calm down' is a verb phrase, so 'stay calm' is better. The last sentence is unclear and is corrected for clarity.

× When I was a child, I was perturbed because I don't have so much patient that time. But when I was child, I always try to be patient with my work, with my study and anything other and it's very crucial for me.

✓ When I was a child, I was perturbed because I didn't have much patience at that time. But when I was a child, I always tried to be patient with my work, my studies, and everything else, and it was very crucial for me.

'Don't have' should be past tense 'didn't have' to match 'when I was a child'. 'So much patient' is incorrect; 'patience' is a noun and 'much' is the correct quantifier. 'Try' should be past tense 'tried'. 'Study' should be plural 'studies' to match the context. The sentence is corrected for tense consistency and noun usage.