耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 구성하며, 예시를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I can stay calm and endure difficulties for a long time. For example, when I face challenging situations at work or school, I try to remain composed and think carefully before reacting.

建議: 문장이 완성되지 않고 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 완성하고, 구체적인 상황을 명확하게 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I feel impatient when I meet rude people because I believe kindness and friendliness are important in society. For example, when someone speaks rudely and ignores others, it makes me feel uncomfortable and impatient.

建議: 답변이 불명확하고 문법적 오류가 많습니다. 상황에 따라 다르다는 점을 명확히 하고, 자신의 감정을 구체적으로 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: It depends on the situation, but most of the time I can endure and think carefully for a long time. This patience is an advantage for me in many aspects of life.

建議: 몇몇 단어 선택이 부적절하고 문장이 완성되지 않았습니다. 직업과 관련된 인내심의 필요성을 명확히 표현하고, 문장을 완성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Absolutely, my job as an actress requires a lot of patience because I often have to wait to be cast by directors and writers. Additionally, preparing for a role can take a long time, so I need to stay patient throughout the process.

建議: 중복된 표현과 어색한 문장이 있습니다. 경험을 통해 인내심이 향상되었음을 명확하고 자연스럽게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Definitely, I have become more patient than when I was a child because I have gained many experiences that taught me how to endure difficult situations.

× Yes, I decide so I am I am a patient person because I can endure and stay calm difficulties for a long time.

✓ Yes, I think so. I am a patient person because I can endure and stay calm during difficulties for a long time.

The original sentence uses 'decide' incorrectly in present tense; 'think' is more appropriate to express opinion. Also, 'stay calm difficulties' lacks a preposition; 'stay calm during difficulties' is correct.

× For example, when I face challenging situations at work or school, I can I try to remain.

✓ For example, when I face challenging situations at work or school, I try to remain calm.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'I can I try to remain' is incorrect; it should be 'I try to remain calm' to complete the thought properly.

× I feel impatient when I meet a rude person because I believe that kindness and friendliness is very important in our society.

✓ I feel impatient when I meet a rude person because I believe that kindness and friendliness are very important in our society.

The subject 'kindness and friendliness' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× For example, when someone speak rudely and ignores others, it makes me uncomfortable and this willing to.

✓ For example, when someone speaks rudely and ignores others, it makes me uncomfortable and unwilling to engage.

The verb 'speak' should be 'speaks' to agree with the singular subject 'someone'. The phrase 'this willing to' is incomplete and unclear; 'unwilling to engage' clarifies the meaning.

× It is it depends on situation but most time I can endure and think carefully for a long time.

✓ It depends on the situation, but most of the time I can endure and think carefully for a long time.

The phrase 'It is it depends' is redundant; 'It depends' suffices. 'Most time' should be 'most of the time' for correct expression.

× So it is my husband type advantage and benefit to me so.

✓ So it is my husband's type of advantage and benefit to me.

The phrase is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'My husband type' should be 'my husband's type' to show possession, and 'advantage and benefit to me' needs clarification and proper structure.

× Absolutely, my job as an actress require a lie a lot of patience because I often wait to be cast by directors and writers.

✓ Absolutely, my job as an actress requires a lot of patience because I often wait to be cast by directors and writers.

The verb 'require' should be 'requires' to agree with the singular subject 'my job'. 'Require a lie a lot of patience' is incorrect; 'requires a lot of patience' is correct.

× Additionally, preparing for allure can take a long time, so I need to stay patient throughout the.

✓ Additionally, preparing for a role can take a long time, so I need to stay patient throughout the process.

'Preparing for allure' is incorrect; likely intended 'preparing for a role'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'throughout the'; adding 'process' completes the thought.

× Definitely umm I became I became more patient than when I was a child because I have many experiences to endure situations, so my personality is great.

✓ Definitely, I have become more patient than when I was a child because I have had many experiences enduring situations, so my personality has improved.

'I became' repeated and past simple is less appropriate here; present perfect 'have become' shows change over time. 'I have many experiences to endure situations' is awkward; 'have had many experiences enduring situations' is clearer. 'My personality is great' is vague; 'has improved' is more precise.