耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、内容が少し不明瞭で、文法的な誤りもあります。より自然で効果的な答えにするために、具体的な経験を簡潔に述べ、文法を正しく使うことが重要です。

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because when I was a child, I played baseball in a team where the coach was very strict, and I learned to be patient through that experience.

建議: 答えは質問に答えていますが、表現が繰り返しで冗長です。より自然に、具体的な例を使いながら簡潔に答える練習をしましょう。

範例: I feel impatient when I have to wait for a long time, like an hour or more, because I find it hard to stay calm in such situations.

建議: 回答は内容が明確で、理由も述べていますが、接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより自然になります。また、語彙の幅を広げると良いでしょう。

範例: When I have to do something for a long time, like one or two hours, I feel quite nervous. Therefore, I usually listen to music beforehand to help me stay calm and focused.

建議: 文法の誤りがあり、意味が少し分かりにくいです。より簡潔で正確な表現を使い、理由を明確に述べることが大切です。

範例: Actually, I am a journalist, and patience is very important in my job because I often have to wait for two or three hours to interview well-known people.

建議: 答えは明確ですが、文法的に改善の余地があります。比較表現を正しく使い、具体的な経験をもう少し詳しく述べると良いでしょう。

範例: Yes, I am much more patient now than when I was a child because I have gained a lot of experience dealing with long and difficult problems.

× when I was a child I involved in baseball teams in my hometown

✓ when I was a child I was involved in baseball teams in my hometown

The verb 'involved' needs to be in the past tense passive form 'was involved' to correctly indicate that the subject participated in the teams in the past.

× and manager and coach were very strict

✓ and the manager and coach were very strict

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'manager and coach' to specify particular people; also, 'manager and coach' refers to two individuals, so plural verb 'were' is correct.

× but I couldn't manage it

✓ but I couldn't manage it

This sentence is correct; no modal verb error detected.

× I don't like the situation like for example I have to wait for a long time such as one hour or so

✓ I don't like situations like, for example, having to wait for a long time, such as one hour or so

The phrase 'the situation like for example' is awkward; 'situations like, for example, having to wait' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× In that case I am impatient person because I can't manage that situation

✓ In that case I am an impatient person because I can't manage that situation

The noun 'impatient person' requires the indefinite article 'an' before it to be grammatically correct.

× I always listen to music before doing very long and patient things

✓ I always listen to music before doing very long and patient tasks

The word 'things' is vague; 'tasks' is more appropriate. Also, 'patient' is an adjective that does not fit here; possibly 'patient' was intended as 'patiently' or 'tedious'.

× Actually, I am a journalist and a a patient is one of the most important factors for my profession

✓ Actually, I am a journalist and patience is one of the most important factors for my profession

The word 'patient' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'patience'. Also, the repeated 'a a' is a typo.

× because I have to wait for people for two or three hours when I have to conduct interviews to well known people

✓ because I have to wait for people for two or three hours when I have to conduct interviews with well-known people

The correct preposition with 'conduct interviews' is 'with', not 'to'. Also, 'well known' should be hyphenated as 'well-known'.

× Yes, I think I am much more patient person compared to in my childhood

✓ Yes, I think I am a much more patient person compared to when I was a child

The noun 'patient person' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Also, 'compared to in my childhood' is awkward; 'compared to when I was a child' is clearer.

× because I could gain a lot of experience about long and difficult problems

✓ because I have gained a lot of experience with long and difficult problems

The present perfect tense 'have gained' is more appropriate here to indicate experience accumulated up to now. Also, 'experience about' should be 'experience with'.