耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to answer the question directly and clearly. Start with a simple statement about whether you are patient or not, then give a reason or example. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition.

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I spent a year and a half preparing for college and studying for exams like IELTS, which required a lot of perseverance.

建議: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using linking words and clearer structure. Start with a topic sentence, then explain with reasons and examples.

範例: I feel impatient when I have to complete tasks on my own without any help because I usually like to finish things quickly and efficiently.

建議: Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition to make your answer more natural.

範例: When I have to work on the same task for a long time, I usually get tired and bored. Moreover, if I cannot finish it quickly, I tend to feel frustrated.

建議: Answer directly and use complete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid short, incomplete sentences.

範例: Yes, my future job will involve working with patients, including children, so I will definitely need to be patient to handle different situations effectively.

建議: Clarify your ideas and use correct grammar. Start with a clear statement, then explain with reasons and examples using linking words.

範例: No, I am not more patient now than when I was a child because as a child, I did not understand how the world works, so I often got frustrated when things did not go my way.

× I think carry on because I wasn't for that.

✓ I think I carried on because I wasn't ready for that.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb structure, making it confusing. Adding 'I' as the subject and changing 'carry on' to past tense 'carried on' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× I took a year cap and a half to go to college.

✓ I took a year and a half to go to college.

The phrase 'year cap and a half' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'a year and a half' to indicate the duration of time.

× So all that all that time I spent studying for IELTS and and other academic exams.

✓ So, all that time I spent studying for IELTS and other academic exams.

The sentence has repetition ('all that all that') and an extra 'and'. Removing the repeated words and extra conjunction improves clarity and sentence structure.

× I think when I will get tired, for example, working on the same thing on the same uh topic for example, will make me bored and if I don't get things done immediately I will get frustrated.

✓ I think when I get tired, for example, working on the same thing or the same topic, it makes me bored, and if I don't get things done immediately, I get frustrated.

In conditional or time clauses with 'when', the present tense is used instead of 'will'. Also, the sentence is long and needs commas and conjunctions to improve clarity.

× I believe my future job will be working with patients, so I need to be patient.

✓ I believe my future job will involve working with patients, so I need to be patient.

The phrase 'will be working' is acceptable but 'will involve working' is more precise. The modal verb 'need to' is correctly used here.

× No, I don't think so, because we need our child.

✓ No, I don't think so, because when we are children,

The phrase 'we need our child' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'when we were children', so replacing it with 'when we are children' corrects the pronoun and meaning.

× You don't understand the word like adults.

✓ You don't understand the world like adults do.

The word 'word' is a typo and should be 'world'. Also, adding 'do' at the end clarifies the comparison.