耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi lặp lại và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và tránh dùng các cụm từ không chính xác như "when I want wanted to". Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, mạch lạc và tránh lặp từ.

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person, but it depends on the situation. If I believe my efforts will be rewarded, I can wait patiently; otherwise, I might lose patience.

建議: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như "trying to wait" thành "try to wait".

範例: Like many people, I feel impatient when results don't come immediately. However, if I expect a good outcome, I try to stay calm and wait for the reward.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên nhưng nên tránh dùng các cụm từ không trang trọng như "Oh God" trong bài thi. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng đa dạng hơn và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn.

範例: If I enjoy the task, doing it for a long time is not a problem. However, if I don't enjoy it, it can feel very difficult and tiring.

建議: Bạn nên tránh dùng các câu ngắt quãng và câu không hoàn chỉnh như "So yeah." Hãy trả lời trực tiếp và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: My current job requires a moderate level of patience, less than I initially expected. However, I want to find another job that demands a higher level of patience.

建議: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi như "I feel like I would. Is much more impatient now" và dùng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

範例: No, I am less patient now than when I was a child. Without a phone, I used to focus on my homework for hours, but now I get impatient, especially when my phone battery dies.

× Yes, I'm still a patient when I want wanted to, but I wouldn't be patient if I know that my effort wouldn't worth the patience.

✓ Yes, I'm still patient when I want to be, but I wouldn't be patient if I knew that my effort wouldn't be worth the patience.

The sentence contains incorrect past tense forms: 'want wanted to' should be 'want to be', 'know' should be 'knew', and 'wouldn't worth' should be 'wouldn't be worth'. The verb 'know' needs to be in past tense 'knew' to match the conditional 'wouldn't be patient'. Also, 'worth' requires the verb 'be' before it. Correcting these ensures proper past tense usage and grammatical structure.

× So yeah. So it would vary from depending on situations.

✓ So yeah. So it would vary depending on the situation.

The phrase 'vary from depending on situations' is incorrect. The preposition 'from' is unnecessary and 'situations' should be singular 'situation' to generalize. The correct phrase is 'vary depending on the situation' which properly uses the preposition 'depending on' and singular noun for general context.

× The thing that makes me feel impatient, like I would say like any other people, impatient when the result doesn't come right away.

✓ The thing that makes me feel impatient is, like I would say, any other person, impatient when the result doesn't come right away.

The phrase 'like any other people' is incorrect because 'people' is plural and does not agree with 'any other'. It should be 'any other person' to refer to an individual. Also, the sentence structure is missing the verb 'is' after 'impatient'. Correcting pronoun number and sentence structure improves clarity and grammar.

× So if it gives me the right reward, I'm going to stay still and trying to wait for the next reward.

✓ So if it gives me the right reward, I'm going to stay still and try to wait for the next reward.

The verb phrase 'stay still and trying' is incorrect because after 'and' the verb should be in base form 'try' to parallel 'stay'. Using 'trying' is a present participle and breaks parallelism. Correcting to 'try' maintains proper verb form and parallel structure.

× Oh God, if I enjoy it then it's not going to be a big of a problem, but if I don't enjoy it then it's going to be a torture.

✓ Oh God, if I enjoy it then it's not going to be a big problem, but if I don't enjoy it then it's going to be torture.

The phrase 'a big of a problem' is incorrect; it should be 'a big problem'. Also, 'a torture' is incorrect because 'torture' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article 'a'. Removing 'a' before 'torture' corrects the quantifier usage.

× No, I would say my job requires A moderate level of patience, not very much from what I initially expected.

✓ No, I would say my job requires a moderate level of patience, not very much compared to what I initially expected.

The phrase 'not very much from what I initially expected' is awkward and incorrect. The preposition 'from' should be replaced with 'compared to' to correctly express comparison. Also, 'A' should be lowercase 'a' as it is in the middle of the sentence.

× And I want another job, but another job requires much higher level of patience.

✓ And I want another job, but another job requires a much higher level of patience.

The phrase 'much higher level' requires the article 'a' before it because 'level' is a singular countable noun. Adding 'a' corrects the singular noun phrase.

× No, I feel like I would. Is much more impatient now because back when I was a child I didn't have a phone and which makes me a super patient person.

✓ No, I feel like I am much more impatient now because back when I was a child I didn't have a phone which made me a super patient person.

The sentence 'I feel like I would. Is much more impatient now' is fragmented and incorrect. It should be 'I feel like I am much more impatient now'. Also, 'which makes me' should be past tense 'which made me' to refer to the past situation. Correcting verb tenses and sentence structure improves clarity.

× I could go for hours on my homework but now I'm not that patient anymore, especially when my phone is all out.

✓ I could go for hours on my homework, but now I'm not that patient anymore, especially when my phone is all out of battery.

The phrase 'my phone is all out' is incomplete; it should be 'all out of battery' or 'all out of charge' to be clear. Also, adding a comma before 'but' improves sentence structure. Correcting conjunction use and completing the phrase enhances clarity.