耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'a patience person' nên là 'a patient person'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I'm not a very patient person, but I'm working on improving it by practicing mindfulness and emotional control. I believe becoming more patient will help me be better for myself and my loved ones.

建議: Bạn nên sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I'm not a person of loud noises' nên là 'I don't like loud noises'. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp và cụ thể hơn về nguyên nhân khiến bạn thiếu kiên nhẫn.

範例: I feel impatient when I'm around loud noises or gossip because I find them distracting. Also, since I value efficiency, I get frustrated when others work slower than me, which is something I want to improve.

建議: Câu trả lời có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ dùng không chính xác như 'may might be a little bit trained' nên là 'might get a little tired'. Bạn nên dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và rõ ràng hơn.

範例: It depends on the project. For assignments, I don't mind working for a long time, but for creative tasks, I might get a little tired during the process. I want to improve my ability to maintain momentum throughout long projects.

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu sự mạch lạc và có lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'As a student of, of course, is it like in an exam for preparation period' không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, dùng câu đơn giản và rõ ràng hơn.

範例: As a student, I need to be patient during exam preparation and when waiting for results or schedules. Patience is important in my studies, and I am still working on improving it.

建議: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng, ví dụ 'using my phone is methods' không đúng. Bạn nên dùng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để truyền đạt ý tốt hơn.

範例: I think I was more patient as a child than I am now. Maybe it's because of my busy lifestyle and the influence of short videos on social media. However, I am trying to improve my patience every day by limiting my phone use.

× I'm not much of A patience person, but I'm trying really hard to improve that, especially focusing on mindfulness and also emotional control since that I actually like of that.

✓ I'm not much of a patient person, but I'm trying really hard to improve that, especially focusing on mindfulness and also emotional control since I actually like that.

The adjective 'patience' is incorrectly used; the correct adjective form is 'patient' to describe a person. Also, 'A' should be lowercase 'a' and 'like of that' is incorrect; it should be 'like that'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× But I would say that by improving that I can become a more better person and for my loved ones and for myself.

✓ But I would say that by improving that I can become a better person for my loved ones and for myself.

The phrase 'more better' is incorrect because 'better' is already a comparative adjective; 'more' is redundant. The correct form is simply 'better'.

× I'm not a person of loud noises and kind of like gossip, but usually when I'm in front of them I would become a bit impatient and also I'm pretty an efficient person so sometimes I get frustrated with people who are less efficient than me.

✓ I'm not a person who likes loud noises and kind of gossip, but usually when I'm around them I become a bit impatient. Also, I'm a pretty efficient person, so sometimes I get frustrated with people who are less efficient than me.

The phrase 'person of loud noises' is incorrect; it should be 'person who likes loud noises'. 'In front of them' is better expressed as 'around them' in this context. 'I'm pretty an efficient person' should be 'I'm a pretty efficient person' for correct article usage.

× If it's like something of an assignment, I don't really mind, but it it's regarding some kind of creative works, then I may might be a little bit trained during the process.

✓ If it's something like an assignment, I don't really mind, but if it's regarding some kind of creative work, then I might be a little bit tired during the process.

The modal verb phrase 'may might' is incorrect; only one modal verb should be used, here 'might' is appropriate. 'Trained' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'tired'. Also, 'creative works' should be singular 'creative work'.

× And that's something I really want to improve on since it's a really important life skill that I can maintain momentum throughout the whole project.

✓ And that's something I really want to improve since it's a really important life skill to maintain momentum throughout the whole project.

The phrase 'improve on' is less appropriate here; 'improve' without 'on' is better. Also, 'that I can maintain' is better expressed as 'to maintain' for clarity and correctness.

× As a student of, of course, is it like in an exam for preparation period, I have to be patient, like to have perseverance and also to be patient when the results or my schedules come out.

✓ As a student, of course, during the exam preparation period, I have to be patient, have perseverance, and also be patient when the results or my schedules come out.

The original sentence has awkward structure and unnecessary words like 'of, of course, is it like'. The correction improves clarity and grammatical flow by restructuring the sentence and removing redundant phrases.

× So also it does require some patience and that's something I still need to work on.

✓ So, it also requires some patience, and that's something I still need to work on.

The phrase 'So also it does require' is awkward; 'So, it also requires' is clearer and grammatically correct. Adding commas improves readability.

× I feel like when I was a child, I was more patient than I was now.

✓ I feel like when I was a child, I was more patient than I am now.

The comparison is between past and present; 'was now' is incorrect because 'now' refers to present time. The correct verb is 'am' to match the present tense.

× maybe of my lifestyle, of my schedules or perhaps the thing that I can see on the media such as like short form videos.

✓ maybe because of my lifestyle, my schedules, or perhaps the things that I see in the media, such as short-form videos.

The preposition 'of' is incorrectly used; 'because of' is correct to indicate cause. 'On the media' should be 'in the media'. Also, 'such as like' is redundant; only one is needed.

× And I'll say that it's kind of sad to actually for me to think that.

✓ And I'd say that it's kind of sad for me to actually think that.

The phrase 'to actually for me to think that' is awkward and incorrect. The correction reorders the sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× But I think that I'm trying to improve it everyday by using my phone is methods.

✓ But I think that I'm trying to improve it every day by using my phone's methods.

The word 'everyday' is an adjective meaning 'commonplace'; the correct phrase is 'every day' meaning 'each day'. Also, 'phone is methods' is incorrect; it should be 'phone's methods' to show possession.