耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is a bit long and repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because when someone angers me, I try to stay calm and not react impulsively. This helps me handle situations more effectively.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentence structures and avoid redundancy. Also, provide specific reasons to support your opinion.

範例: I feel impatient with people who lie because they don't give honest answers. Having a conversation with them feels tiring since they keep repeating untruths.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your ideas better and use linking words to connect your thoughts. Also, avoid filler phrases like 'or what'.

範例: It depends on the task. If I enjoy it, I feel motivated and grateful to do it for a long time, which helps me perform well.

建議: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use correct sentence structures and clarify your points. Avoid negative expressions like 'we can't complain' if they do not fit the context.

範例: Absolutely. As a nurse, being patient and compassionate is essential because patients are vulnerable and need our support.

建議: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and logically. Use linking words to connect your thoughts and avoid contradictory statements.

範例: Yes, I am more patient now because as I mature, I understand people's backgrounds and reasons for their behavior, which helps me be more tolerant.

× I don't usually lash out at them easily, but I try to compose myself and try to make myself calm, so I think I'm a very patient person.

✓ I don't usually lash out at them easily, but I try to compose myself and try to calm myself, so I think I'm a very patient person.

The phrase 'make myself calm' is incorrect because 'make' is typically followed by a base verb, not an adjective. The correct form is 'try to calm myself' where 'calm' is used as a verb. This improves the sentence's grammatical accuracy and naturalness.

× Oh, I think people who are liars, I get very impatient with them because they won't give you a truthfully answer.

✓ Oh, I think people who are liars, I get very impatient with them because they won't give you a truthful answer.

The word 'truthfully' is an adverb, but the sentence requires an adjective to describe 'answer'. The correct adjective is 'truthful'. Using 'truthfully' here is a misuse of parts of speech.

× So they'll your conversation with them will be just a cycle of them lying to you and it and that really will tire you out.

✓ So your conversation with them will be just a cycle of them lying to you, and that really will tire you out.

The phrase 'they'll your conversation' is ungrammatical and confusing. Removing 'they'll' corrects the sentence structure and clarifies the meaning. The sentence now properly connects the ideas with 'and' and is easier to understand.

× To be quite frank with you, it depends if that thing will go on a long time and I really enjoyed it, I think I will be very good at it and I will be grateful that I have that kind of job or what.

✓ To be quite frank with you, it depends if that thing goes on for a long time and I really enjoy it; I think I will be very good at it and I will be grateful that I have that kind of job or something.

The sentence mixes tenses incorrectly. 'Will go on' should be present tense 'goes on' in the conditional clause. 'Enjoyed' should be present tense 'enjoy' to match the condition. Also, 'or what' is informal and unclear; 'or something' is more appropriate. These changes improve tense consistency and clarity.

× I've been working as a nurse and it's really important that we are patient and compassionate in our job because our patients are in their vulnerable States and we can't complain.

✓ I've been working as a nurse and it's really important that we are patient and compassionate in our job because our patients are in their vulnerable states and we can't complain.

The word 'States' is incorrectly capitalized. It should be lowercase 'states' as it is a common noun here. Capitalization errors can distract readers and are grammatically incorrect.

× We can do anything about it.

✓ We can't do anything about it.

The original sentence contradicts the context. The student likely meant to say 'We can't do anything about it' to express inability to complain or change the situation. This correction aligns the sentence with the intended meaning.

× I think yes, when you're growing or maturing, you tend to think and observe people around you and you'll know why they are like that because you can see how they were nurtured, so you can't understand them.

✓ I think yes, when you're growing or maturing, you tend to think and observe people around you and you'll know why they are like that because you can see how they were nurtured, so you can understand them.

The phrase 'so you can't understand them' contradicts the previous explanation. The correct meaning is 'so you can understand them'. Using 'can't' here is a pronoun misuse that changes the intended meaning.