耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to use more natural phrasing and correct grammar, such as 'I always remain calm and patient in stressful situations.' Also, avoid redundancy and clarify your ideas more clearly. Keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I usually stay calm during stressful situations. However, sometimes when I feel frustrated with other issues, it becomes harder to maintain my patience.

建議: Focus on clear and coherent sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Avoid unclear phrases like 'ambitious next associations.' Instead, explain specific reasons that make you impatient, using simple and precise language.

範例: I feel impatient when I have too many tasks to handle at once, especially if I am already frustrated with other things. This makes it difficult to stay calm and focused.

建議: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and incomplete sentences. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Explain why long tasks frustrate you and how it affects your day.

範例: I feel frustrated when I have to do a task that takes longer than usual because it disrupts my daily schedule and makes it harder to complete other responsibilities.

建議: Use correct verb tenses and avoid repetition. Provide a clear explanation of why patience is important in your job, using linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, my job requires me to be patient, calm, and focused because I work as a bookkeeper. If I rush, I might make mistakes with the numbers, which can cause problems.

建議: Improve grammar and clarity by using correct tenses and sentence structures. Clearly compare your patience now and as a child, and explain reasons with linking words.

範例: Honestly, I was more patient and calm as a child because I had fewer responsibilities. Now, with more tasks and duties, I tend to get frustrated more easily.

× I always remain calm and patience when in a situation, stressful situations.

✓ I always remain calm and patient in stressful situations.

The word 'patience' is a noun, but here an adjective is needed to describe the subject's state. 'Patient' is the correct adjective form to use with 'calm' to describe how the person remains in situations.

× when in a situation, stressful situations.

✓ in stressful situations.

The phrase 'when in a situation, stressful situations' is awkward and incorrect. The definite article 'a' is unnecessary here, and the phrase should be simplified to 'in stressful situations' for clarity and correctness.

× But sometimes it will go out of my hand because if you are frustrated with some other thing so it will make the problem more even worse.

✓ But sometimes it goes out of my hands because if you are frustrated with something else, it makes the problem even worse.

The phrase 'will go out of my hand' is incorrect; the idiom is 'go out of my hands' or 'out of my control'. Also, mixing future tense 'will' with conditional 'if' is awkward here; present tense is more appropriate to express general truths or habitual actions.

× So that time we cannot remain calm.

✓ At that time, we cannot remain calm.

The phrase 'So that time' is incorrect; the correct preposition to indicate a specific time is 'At that time'.

× We feel very ambitious next associations when there is a too much, when there is too much need to handle and the time if you are frustrated with something else, it will make us even more frustrating and make it make it as more competent to remain calm and composed in that situations.

✓ I feel very anxious in such situations when there is too much to handle, and if you are frustrated with something else, it makes it even more difficult to remain calm and composed in those situations.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun use ('we' instead of 'I'), incorrect word choice ('ambitious' instead of 'anxious'), and awkward phrasing. Correcting pronouns to match the speaker, choosing appropriate adjectives, and clarifying the sentence structure improves clarity and correctness.

× when there is a too much, when there is too much need to handle

✓ when there is too much to handle

The phrase 'a too much' is incorrect; 'too much' is an uncountable quantifier and does not require an article 'a'.

× it will make us even more frustrating and make it make it as more competent to remain calm and composed in that situations.

✓ it makes us even more frustrated and makes it more difficult to remain calm and composed in those situations.

The pronoun 'us' is acceptable if referring to a group, but 'frustrating' should be 'frustrated' to describe feelings. Also, 'make it make it as more competent' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'makes it more difficult' to express the intended meaning.

× How do you feel when you have to do something for a long time?

✓ No correction needed.

This sentence is grammatically correct and appropriate for the context.

× I feel very frustrated if I'm doing something for a long time, uh, which takes more than, which takes more time than usual, because in a day, I organize, uh, something, what to do, uh, in and, uh, this, this one task will take more time and which will, uh, in which will then.

✓ I feel very frustrated if I'm doing something for a long time, especially if it takes more time than usual, because I organize my day with tasks, and if one task takes longer, it affects the rest.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correction clarifies the meaning, removes unnecessary fillers, and corrects quantifier usage to express the idea clearly.

× Yes, my job required to be patient and really calm and focused because I work as a bookkeeper.

✓ Yes, my job requires me to be patient, really calm, and focused because I work as a bookkeeper.

The verb 'required' is past tense but the context is present. It should be 'requires' to match the present tense. Also, 'required to be patient' is incomplete; it should be 'requires me to be patient'.

× So it's working with the numbers.

✓ So it involves working with numbers.

The phrase 'it's working with the numbers' is awkward. 'Involves working with numbers' is a more natural and grammatically correct expression.

× So if there if you rush to do to do a task, it will change then makes a lot of mistakes.

✓ So if you rush to do a task, it will cause a lot of mistakes.

The original sentence has redundant words and unclear pronoun references. Simplifying the sentence and correcting the verb usage clarifies the meaning.

× So it cannot be.

✓ So it cannot be rushed.

The phrase 'So it cannot be' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'rushed' completes the thought and clarifies the meaning.

× Frankly, I was very patient and calm when I was a child because I don't have a lot of things to do or more responsibility or need to pay attention.

✓ Frankly, I was very patient and calm when I was a child because I didn't have a lot of things to do or many responsibilities or needs to pay attention to.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly ('don't have' should be 'didn't have'). Also, 'more responsibility' should be 'many responsibilities' to match plural form and quantifier usage.

× or more responsibility or need to pay attention.

✓ or many responsibilities or needs to pay attention to.

'More responsibility' is vague and should be 'many responsibilities' to indicate multiple tasks. Also, 'need to pay attention' should be 'needs to pay attention to' for grammatical correctness.

× But now I have a lot of responsibility, more tasks to do, so basically we'll be more frustrated.

✓ But now I have a lot of responsibilities and more tasks to do, so basically I am more frustrated.

The pronoun 'we'll' is incorrect here; the speaker is referring to themselves, so 'I am' is appropriate. Also, 'responsibility' should be plural 'responsibilities' to match 'tasks'.