耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，并使用更自然的表达方式。

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because when I play games like Parcel, I focus on completing tasks without feeling anxious.

建議: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，建议使用更清晰的句子结构，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

範例: I feel impatient when I face difficult problems for a long time and can't find a solution. In such cases, I try to stay calm and think carefully to solve them.

建議: 回答表达较为自然，但可以使用更多连接词和具体细节来丰富内容。

範例: At first, I feel impatient because I don't like doing something for a long time. However, once I start, I often find that I actually enjoy the process.

建議: 回答中时态使用不当，且表达不够流畅，建议注意时态一致性并简化句子。

範例: Absolutely. As a university student, I had to write essays every month. I needed to research online and then summarize the information in my own words before writing.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰，建议使用简单句并注意主谓一致。

範例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I have learned that patience helps people achieve many things and improve themselves.

× I usually focus on the time during I pick up all the parcels so and I never be anxious when I play it.

✓ I usually focus on the time while I am picking up all the parcels, and I am never anxious when I play it.

这里需要使用现在进行时态来描述正在进行的动作，原句中'during I pick up'结构不正确，应改为'while I am picking up'。另外，'I never be anxious'应改为'I am never anxious'，因为be动词需要与主语和时态一致。

× I never be anxious when I play it.

✓ I am never anxious when I play it.

这里的动词be需要用现在时态，因为描述的是习惯性动作，'never be'是不正确的，应改为'am never'。

× When I drop in the difficult problems and have a long time, I couldn't find out the ways to solve it and in this situation I feel very impatient and I will try my best to help me to calm down and solve it.

✓ When I encounter difficult problems and spend a long time, I can't find ways to solve them, and in this situation I feel very impatient and I try my best to calm down and solve them.

'drop in the difficult problems'用词不当，应改为'encounter difficult problems'。'have a long time'表达不准确，应改为'spend a long time'。'help me to calm down'结构错误，应改为'I try my best to calm down'。此外，'couldn't'应改为'can't'以保持时态一致。

× When I drop in the difficult problems and have a long time, I couldn't find out the ways to solve it and in this situation I feel very impatient and I will try my best to help me to calm down and solve it.

✓ When I encounter difficult problems and spend a long time, I can't find ways to solve them, and in this situation I feel very impatient and I try my best to calm down and solve them.

动词时态和形式需要保持一致，'drop in'应改为'encounter'，'have a long time'应改为'spend a long time'，'help me to calm down'应改为'I try my best to calm down'。

× At first I will feel impatient because I don't want to do a thing for such a long time, but when I start to do these things I can find that I really enjoy it.

✓ At first I feel impatient because I don't want to do something for such a long time, but when I start to do these things I find that I really enjoy it.

'will feel'在这里不合适，因为描述的是习惯性或一般情况，应使用一般现在时'feel'。'a thing'应改为'something'更自然。

× Before that I really need to find some resources online to conclude it in my words, then to write an essay.

✓ Before that I really need to find some resources online to summarize them in my own words, then write an essay.

'conclude it in my words'表达不准确，应改为'summarize them in my own words'，'conclude'通常指结束或总结，'summarize'更合适。

× Before that I really need to find some resources online to conclude it in my words, then to write an essay.

✓ Before that I really need to find some resources online to summarize them in my own words, then write an essay.

'resources'是复数，后面指代应使用复数代词'them'，而不是单数'it'。

× Yes of course, when I was a child I don't know what this patience mean, but now I grow up I know that if a people have a skills called patience he will do a lot of things and patient can improve people to become better and better.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was a child I didn't know what patience means, but now I have grown up I know that if a person has a skill called patience, he will do a lot of things and patience can help people become better and better.

'I don't know'应改为过去时'didn't know'，'this patience mean'应改为'patience means'，'a people'应改为'a person'，'a skills'应改为'a skill'，'patient'应改为'patience'，并且句子中时态和单复数需要保持一致。