耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with a clear topic sentence and support it with a reason. Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity.

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because my job requires me to stay calm and composed even in stressful situations.

建議: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Focus on directly answering the question with specific examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: I feel impatient when I am stuck in traffic on my way to work because it delays my schedule and makes me anxious.

建議: Your answer is understandable but could be more structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words to improve coherence.

範例: When I have to do something for a long time, I usually listen to music or call my friends and family to keep myself entertained and make the time pass more quickly.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Provide a direct response with supporting details that explain why your job requires patience. Use complete sentences and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, my job in the transport industry requires a lot of patience because I often have to deal with delays and unexpected situations calmly.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to clearly compare your past and present patience levels with specific reasons, using linking words for coherence.

範例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I used to get upset easily, but now I have learned how to manage my emotions better.

× Yes, I believe I am a patient also because of on my work I am I am trying to very keep and keep calm.

✓ Yes, I believe I am patient also because at my work I am trying very hard to keep calm.

The phrase 'because of on my work' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at' when referring to a workplace. Also, 'trying to very keep and keep calm' is awkward; it should be 'trying very hard to keep calm' to express effort properly.

× Yes, I believe I am a patient also because of on my work I am I am trying to very keep and keep calm.

✓ Yes, I believe I am patient also because at my work I am trying very hard to keep calm.

The phrase 'trying to very keep and keep calm' has incorrect word order. 'Very' should modify 'hard' and 'keep calm' should be the verb phrase. Correct order is 'trying very hard to keep calm'.

× Yeah, I, I feel impatient when I'm doing a Samsung dress, for example, when I go to the work, I mean, I sometime I'm facing traffic, so in the line, so that time I'm doing something.

✓ Yeah, I feel impatient when I'm doing something stressful, for example, when I go to work and sometimes face traffic. While waiting in line, I try to do something to pass the time.

The original sentence is confusing and contains unclear phrases like 'doing a Samsung dress' and 'so in the line'. The sentence structure is fragmented and needs to be reorganized for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yeah, I, I feel impatient when I'm doing a Samsung dress, for example, when I go to the work, I mean, I sometime I'm facing traffic, so in the line, so that time I'm doing something.

✓ Yeah, I feel impatient when I'm doing something stressful, for example, when I go to work and sometimes face traffic. While waiting in line, I try to do something to pass the time.

The phrase 'when I go to the work' should be 'when I go to work' without 'the'. Also, 'in the line' should be 'while waiting in line' to correctly express the situation.

× Yeah, I'm that time I'm listening a song or something. I make a call to my friends and families and communicate together. So it is doing my time.

✓ At that time, I'm listening to a song or something. I make calls to my friends and family and communicate with them. So it helps me pass the time.

The phrase 'listening a song' requires the preposition 'to' as in 'listening to a song'. 'Families' should be singular 'family' when referring collectively. 'Communicate together' is awkward; 'communicate with them' is better. 'So it is doing my time' is incorrect; 'helps me pass the time' is the correct expression.

× I make a call to my friends and families and communicate together.

✓ I make calls to my friends and family and communicate with them.

'Families' is incorrect when referring to a group of people collectively; 'family' is the correct collective noun. Also, 'communicate together' is awkward; 'communicate with them' is the proper phrase.

× Of course, yes, my job is regarding the patient because of my job related to transport and which which is a very successful and.

✓ Of course, yes, my job requires patience because it is related to transport, which is very demanding.

The phrase 'my job is regarding the patient' is incorrect; it should be 'my job requires patience'. 'Because of my job related to transport' is awkward; 'because it is related to transport' is better. The sentence is incomplete and needs to be finished properly.

× Of course, yes, my job is regarding the patient because of my job related to transport and which which is a very successful and.

✓ Of course, yes, my job requires patience because it is related to transport, which is very demanding.

The sentence is incomplete and contains repeated words 'which which'. It needs restructuring for clarity and completeness.

× I thought, yes, I believe, I believe I am a more patient than when I was a child who goes up that time I was a younger so the I'm invested very easily.

✓ I think, yes, I believe I am more patient than when I was a child because at that time I was younger and got upset very easily.

'I thought' should be 'I think' to express current belief. 'A more patient' is incorrect; 'more patient' without 'a' is correct. 'Who goes up that time' is unclear and incorrect; 'because at that time' is better. 'I was a younger' should be 'I was younger'. 'I'm invested very easily' is incorrect; 'I got upset very easily' is appropriate.

× I thought, yes, I believe, I believe I am a more patient than when I was a child who goes up that time I was a younger so the I'm invested very easily.

✓ I think, yes, I believe I am more patient than when I was a child because at that time I was younger and got upset very easily.

The pronoun usage is confusing and incorrect. 'Who goes up that time' is not a proper pronoun phrase. It should be rephrased to clarify the subject and time reference.

× So that time nowadays I know how I can manage that things.

✓ Nowadays, I know how I can manage those things.

'So that time nowadays' is contradictory and incorrect; 'Nowadays' alone is sufficient. 'That things' should be 'those things' to match plural noun with correct demonstrative pronoun.