耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Use simple, direct sentences and explain briefly why you are impatient.

範例: No, I am not a patient person because I like to keep moving and manage my time efficiently. Waiting makes me feel restless, so I find it hard to be patient in many situations.

建議: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to give a clear reason with specific details and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: I feel impatient when I have to wait for a long time, especially if I think the delay is unnecessary. For example, waiting in a slow queue makes me feel like my time is being wasted.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but is confusing. Use clear sentences and linking words to explain your feelings and reasons logically.

範例: I feel frustrated and irritable when I have to do something for a long time because I think it wastes my time. I prefer to use my time productively instead.

建議: Good content but improve grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

範例: Yes, my job as a nursing officer requires me to be patient because I need to care for and observe patients carefully. Being patient is very important in my work.

建議: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Give a clear comparison with supporting details using linking words.

範例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because as an adult, I think more carefully and understand situations better. Therefore, I have developed my patience over time.

× I can't unable to be per patient in every situation because I'm very fond of moving here and there.

✓ I can't be patient in every situation because I'm very fond of moving here and there.

The phrase 'can't unable to be' is incorrect because it uses two negatives together, which is redundant. The correct modal verb usage is 'can't be' to express inability.

× I can't unable to be per patient in every situation because I'm very fond of moving here and there.

✓ I can't be patient in every situation because I'm very fond of moving here and there.

The word 'per patient' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'patient' to describe the person's quality.

× So I have to keep my time management also.

✓ So I have to keep my time management as well.

The phrase 'keep my time management' is awkward; 'keep my time management as well' is more natural. Also, 'also' is better replaced with 'as well' at the end of the sentence.

× That's why I haven't able to wait.

✓ That's why I haven't been able to wait.

The modal verb phrase 'haven't able to' is incorrect; it should be 'haven't been able to' to form the present perfect tense with ability.

× It's something I feel waiting a long time and wasting my own time for that's unnecessary for others.

✓ I feel impatient when I have to wait a long time and waste my own time for things that are unnecessary for others.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Reconstructing it improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Our vague opinion.

✓ It's just a vague opinion.

The phrase 'Our vague opinion' is incomplete and unclear; adding 'It's just' makes it a complete sentence.

× That's why I lost my.

✓ That's why I lose my patience.

The sentence is incomplete; adding 'patience' completes the thought.

× Actually I feel very frustrated and it's waste of time for myself and others also make very bad information for this duration and I make more productivity to using this time.

✓ Actually, I feel very frustrated because it's a waste of time for myself and others. It also creates very bad impressions during this time, and I could be more productive using this time.

The original sentence is confusing and contains incorrect phrases like 'make very bad information' and 'make more productivity to using this time.' Rephrasing clarifies the meaning and corrects grammar.

× So I feel very frustrated and irritable.

✓ So, I feel very frustrated and irritable.

Adding a comma after 'So' improves sentence flow and clarity.

× Absolutely, I am a nursing officer so it needs to be a patient because as and every time we have consider about patient care and observe the patient, that time we have to be on patient.

✓ Absolutely, I am a nursing officer, so I need to be patient because every time we have to consider patient care and observe the patient, we have to be patient.

The modal verb 'needs to be' is incorrect for the subject 'I'; it should be 'need to be.' Also, 'on patient' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'patient.'

× because as and every time we have consider about patient care and observe the patient

✓ because every time we have to consider patient care and observe the patient

The phrase 'consider about' is incorrect; the verb 'consider' does not require the preposition 'about.' Also, 'as and every time' is redundant; 'every time' suffices.

× It's very important and require for my job.

✓ It's very important and required for my job.

The verb 'require' should be in the past participle form 'required' to agree with 'It's' and form the passive meaning.

× Of course, now I am an adult and I have some, uh, thoughtful thinking, uh, that's why I more developed my skill and to being a patient, uh, rather than my childhood, uh, I think most probably I'm impatient.

✓ Of course, now I am an adult and I have some thoughtful thinking; that's why I have more developed my skills and am more patient than in my childhood. I think I was probably more impatient then.

The original sentence has pronoun and verb form errors: 'I more developed' should be 'I have more developed,' 'to being a patient' should be 'am more patient,' and the comparison with childhood needs correction. Also, 'most probably I'm impatient' is better expressed as 'I was probably more impatient then.'