耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question first, then provide clear supporting details. Avoid redundancy and irrelevant information. Use simple, correct sentences and link your ideas logically.

範例: No, I am not a very patient person. For example, I often get frustrated when things don't happen quickly. However, I try to stay calm by eating healthy food and relaxing my mind.

建議: Your answer is confusing and has repetition. Focus on one or two specific reasons that make you impatient. Use linking words to connect your ideas and explain how you manage impatience clearly.

範例: Many things make me feel impatient, such as waiting in long queues. To cope, I listen to calm music and practice yoga at home, which helps me stay relaxed.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your feelings and coping strategies using linking words. Be specific and concise.

範例: When I have to do something for a long time, I sometimes feel impatient because of the heavy workload. However, I remind myself to stay calm and listen to advice from people around me, which helps me manage stress.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and has repetition. Clearly state that your job requires patience and give specific examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: Yes, my job requires a great deal of patience. For example, when I interact with IMA students, their families, friends, or teachers, I always try to speak calmly to handle situations effectively.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Use correct sentence structures and avoid repeating words. Provide a clear reason for your increased patience.

範例: Yes, I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child. As a child, I was impatient because I had no responsibilities. Now, with family duties, I have learned to be more patient.

× No, not really, I'm not a patient person however there are on the regular basis.

✓ No, not really, I'm not a patient person; however, it happens on a regular basis.

The phrase 'there are on the regular basis' is incorrect because 'there are' requires a plural noun to follow. Here, the intended meaning is that impatience occurs regularly, so 'it happens on a regular basis' is appropriate.

× There are many diseases are I faced but it's not frequently and I always prefer to eat healthy and fresh mind and relax my mood.

✓ I have faced many difficulties, but not frequently, and I always prefer to eat healthily, keep a fresh mind, and relax my mood.

The original sentence has incorrect structure and word choice. 'There are many diseases are I faced' is ungrammatical. Also, 'eat healthy and fresh mind' is incorrect; 'eat healthily' (adverb) and 'keep a fresh mind' are correct. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× That's why I'm not a patient person.

✓ That's why I'm not a patient person.

No correction needed here as the sentence is grammatically correct.

× Well, there are lots of things that makes me impatient but I'm never getting harm by other other other another others world.

✓ Well, there are lots of things that make me impatient, but I never get harmed by others in the world.

The verb 'makes' should be 'make' to agree with the plural subject 'things'. Also, 'I'm never getting harm' is incorrect; it should be 'I never get harmed'. The phrase 'other other other another others world' is unclear and corrected to 'others in the world'.

× That's why I always prefer to listen calm music and get motivate myself and do exercise and yoga at my home.

✓ That's why I always prefer to listen to calm music, motivate myself, and do exercise and yoga at home.

The phrase 'listen calm music' requires the preposition 'to'. 'Get motivate myself' is incorrect; it should be 'motivate myself'. Also, 'at my home' is better as 'at home'. The conjunctions are adjusted for better flow.

× Well it depends upon the how much workload on my head.

✓ Well, it depends on how much workload I have on my head.

The phrase 'depends upon the how much workload' is incorrect. 'Depends on' is the correct preposition, and 'how much workload I have' clarifies the meaning.

× It sometimes make me impatient but I say to myself that don't panic and come, come and motivate myself and always prefer to listen my surrounding people and many ways they helps me a lot.

✓ It sometimes makes me impatient, but I tell myself not to panic, to stay calm, motivate myself, and I always prefer to listen to the people around me; in many ways, they help me a lot.

'It sometimes make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Say to myself that don't panic' is incorrect; it should be 'tell myself not to panic'. 'Listen my surrounding people' requires 'listen to'. 'They helps' should be 'they help'.

× Yes of course my job definitely require a great deal of patience for instance IMA students when dealing with with the family or the friends or the teachers my my most preferable choice is that talking to the another person with the calmness.

✓ Yes, of course, my job definitely requires a great deal of patience. For instance, when IMA students deal with family, friends, or teachers, my preferred approach is to talk to the other person calmly.

'Require' should be 'requires' to agree with singular subject 'job'. The sentence is long and unclear; it is split and rephrased for clarity. 'Talking to the another person with the calmness' is corrected to 'talk to the other person calmly'.

× Yes, I am definite definitely more patience now than when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child.

'Definite definitely' is redundant; 'definitely' suffices. 'More patience' should be 'more patient' because 'patient' is an adjective describing the subject, not a noun.

× When I was a younger I was a quite impatient because I had no real responsibilities on my end, responsibilities on my head and when I I am getting older and I have a responsibilities with towards my family, that's why.

✓ When I was younger, I was quite impatient because I had no real responsibilities. As I am getting older and have responsibilities towards my family, that's why.

'A younger' is incorrect; 'younger' is used without 'a'. 'A quite impatient' is incorrect; 'quite impatient' is correct. 'Responsibilities on my end, responsibilities on my head' is redundant and awkward; simplified to 'no real responsibilities'. 'I have a responsibilities with towards' is incorrect; corrected to 'have responsibilities towards'.