耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "I used to keep myself calm" and "I have to keep a lot of patience." Instead, use simpler, clearer expressions and correct grammar, such as "I stay calm in stressful situations because my job as a retail sales supervisor requires a lot of patience."

範例: Yes, I am a patient person. In my role as a retail sales supervisor, I often stay calm during stressful situations because dealing with customers requires a great deal of patience.

建議: Your answer is understandable but could be clearer and more natural. Avoid awkward phrasing like "such a situation which is not in my hands" and "I can't do anything at a time." Try to use simpler, more natural expressions and add linking words for coherence.

範例: I feel impatient when situations are beyond my control and I am unable to take any action. In those moments, it’s hard for me to stay calm.

建議: Your answer is a bit confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Also, avoid repetition and incorrect verb tenses. Use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: When I have to work on something for a long time, I stay calm and patient because I believe that patience leads to better results in the end.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammar mistakes and redundancy. Use correct forms like "patient" instead of "patience" as an adjective, and avoid repeating phrases. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Absolutely. As a retail sales supervisor, I need to be calm and patient when dealing with customers, especially when they are frustrated or in a hurry. Handling these situations calmly helps me provide better service.

建議: Your answer has good content but needs clearer structure and grammar corrections. Use linking words to compare past and present, and correct phrases like "a very impatient person" and "calm and patient." Also, clarify your reasons more specifically.

範例: Honestly, I was more impatient as a child because I wanted things done quickly. However, now I am much more patient, especially living in this country where taking time to do things carefully is important.

× I used to keep myself calm in this stressful situations as well as I am working as a retail sales supervisor.

✓ I used to keep myself calm in these stressful situations as well as I am working as a retail sales supervisor.

The word 'situations' is plural, so the demonstrative adjective should be 'these' instead of 'this' to agree in number.

× So while dealing with the customer I have to keep a lot of patience.

✓ So while dealing with customers I have to keep a lot of patience.

The word 'customer' should be plural 'customers' because it refers to multiple people in general.

× I feel impatient whenever there is such a situation which is not in my hands and I can't do anything at a time.

✓ I feel impatient whenever there is a situation that is not in my hands and I can't do anything at that time.

The phrase 'such a situation which' is awkward; 'a situation that' is clearer. Also, 'at a time' should be 'at that time' to indicate a specific moment.

× Whenever I used to do something for a long time, I keep keep myself calm and be patient at the moment to so that the work that I'm doing on a time could give me a good and best results.

✓ Whenever I have to do something for a long time, I keep myself calm and be patient at the moment so that the work I'm doing can give me good results.

The phrase 'used to do' is incorrect here; 'have to do' fits better. The repeated 'keep' is a typo. 'On a time' is incorrect; 'at the moment' or 'at that time' is better. 'Good and best results' is redundant; 'good results' suffices.

× So I have to be calm and patience while dealing with the customers because sometimes they were so frustrated.

✓ So I have to be calm and patient while dealing with customers because sometimes they are so frustrated.

'Patience' is a noun; the adjective 'patient' is needed here. Also, 'the customers' should be 'customers' for general reference. 'They were' should be 'they are' to match present tense.

× Customers come into the store and they are they are in very hurry and I have to deal them in a very calm manner.

✓ Customers come into the store and they are in a hurry, and I have to deal with them in a very calm manner.

The phrase 'in very hurry' should be 'in a hurry'. Also, 'deal them' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'deal with them'.

× Honestly, when I was a child, I used to be very impatient person because I have to make the things done as soon as possible.

✓ Honestly, when I was a child, I used to be a very impatient person because I had to get things done as soon as possible.

The article 'a' is needed before 'very impatient person'. 'Make the things done' is incorrect; 'get things done' is the correct expression. Also, tense consistency requires 'had to' instead of 'have to'.

× But as of now, I have to be calm and patience because the country where I'm living right now, I have to do the work very patiently here.

✓ But as of now, I have to be calm and patient because in the country where I'm living right now, I have to do the work very patiently here.

'Patience' is a noun; the adjective 'patient' is needed here. Also, the preposition 'in' is required before 'the country' to indicate location.