耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ như 'torwards' nên sửa thành 'towards'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp lại ý và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Honestly, I am not very patient, especially when others make mistakes towards me. Therefore, I practice meditation regularly to improve my patience in difficult situations.

建議: Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản và rõ ràng hơn, tránh dùng từ không chính xác như 'antagonist' và 'conflict of interest' không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này. Hãy cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể và dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc.

範例: I feel impatient when I deal with annoying people. For example, some classmates often interrupt me and argue, which makes me lose my temper quickly.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng từ nối để liên kết các ý và sửa một số lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp như 'concentrating' nên là 'concentrated'.

範例: I enjoy doing my favorite activities for a long time because I feel motivated and concentrated. For example, recently I spent most of my time researching for my final dissertation, which gave me a sense of achievement rather than impatience.

建議: Bạn có lỗi dùng từ không chính xác như 'impatient' thay vì 'patient' và 'reportes' nên là 'reports'. Hãy chú ý chọn từ đúng và sửa lỗi chính tả để câu trả lời tự nhiên và chính xác hơn.

範例: Yes, definitely. My major is accounting and auditing, which requires a lot of patience because I have to carefully analyze numerical data. For instance, I need to be meticulous and patient when reviewing reports to ensure accuracy and help my organization avoid problems.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng có thể rút gọn và tránh lặp từ như 'patience' nhiều lần. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản và chính xác hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

範例: I believe I am more patient now than when I was a child because I practice meditation regularly, which helps me stay calm. However, I still find it hard to be patient in some difficult situations, but I always try my best to control my emotions.

× I usually take up meditation to practice being patient when I struggle with disturbance situations.

✓ I usually take up meditation to practice being patient when I struggle with disturbing situations.

The adjective 'disturbance' is a noun and cannot directly modify 'situations'. The correct form is the present participle 'disturbing' to describe situations that cause disturbance.

× While I can easily lose my temper when I face with people who are nuisance, for instance, the antagonist at my classes always find out mistakes and fight again while I speak, leading to conflict of interest and a sense of impatience.

✓ While I can easily lose my temper when I face people who are a nuisance, for instance, the antagonist in my classes always finds mistakes and fights back while I speak, leading to conflict of interest and a sense of impatience.

The verb 'face' does not require the preposition 'with'. Also, 'nuisance' is a countable noun and needs an article 'a'. Additionally, subject-verb agreement errors are corrected ('antagonist' is singular, so 'find' and 'fight' should be 'finds' and 'fights').

× the antagonist at my classes always find out mistakes and fight again while I speak

✓ the antagonist in my classes always finds mistakes and fights back while I speak

The subject 'antagonist' is singular, so the verbs should be in third person singular form: 'finds' and 'fights'. Also, 'fight again' is awkward; 'fights back' is more natural.

× the antagonist at my classes always find out mistakes and fight again while I speak

✓ the antagonist in my classes always finds mistakes and fights back while I speak

The correct preposition to indicate location is 'in' rather than 'at' when referring to classes.

× I have allocated almost all my time to do research in order to fulfill my final dissertation at university.

✓ I have allocated almost all my time to doing research in order to complete my final dissertation at university.

After 'allocate time', the gerund form 'doing' is used instead of the infinitive 'to do'. Also, 'fulfill' is incorrect here; 'complete' is the appropriate verb for finishing a dissertation.

× I need to be meticulous, impatient when reviewing reportes so that I can ensure accuracy and help my organization avoid problems.

✓ I need to be meticulous, not impatient, when reviewing reports so that I can ensure accuracy and help my organization avoid problems.

The word 'impatient' contradicts the intended meaning; it should be negated to clarify the contrast. Also, 'reportes' is a misspelling of 'reports'.

× I need to be meticulous, impatient when reviewing reportes so that I can ensure accuracy and help my organization avoid problems.

✓ I need to be meticulous, not impatient, when reviewing reports so that I can ensure accuracy and help my organization avoid problems.

The plural form 'reports' is correct here instead of the misspelled 'reportes'.

× However, that this doesn't mean that I can always keep my patience in every situation, especially when I face disturbing circumstances.

✓ However, this doesn't mean that I can always keep my patience in every situation, especially when I face disturbing circumstances.

The phrase 'that this' is incorrect; it should be 'this' alone to properly connect the sentence.