耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific reasons.

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I believe that achieving important goals takes time. Therefore, I prefer to work steadily over the long term rather than rushing to get quick results.

建議: Improve clarity and coherence by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically. Provide specific examples and avoid unclear phrases.

範例: I feel impatient when I have to wait for something important, especially if the delay is unexpected. For instance, waiting in a long queue or being stuck in traffic makes me restless because I value my time and want to use it productively.

建議: Make your answer more fluent and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide clear reasons for your feelings.

範例: I feel comfortable when I have to work on something for a long time because I enjoy taking on long-term projects. As I mentioned earlier, I prefer long-term goals over short-term ones.

建議: Clarify your answer by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your point clearly and provide specific details about your experience.

範例: Although I haven't worked yet, my master's degree requires me to conduct research. This process demands a lot of patience to find accurate and reliable information.

建議: Improve sentence flow and clarity by using linking words and avoiding fragmented sentences. Provide specific examples to support your answer.

範例: Of course, I am more patient now than when I was a child. Back then, I wanted everything quickly, like toys or computer games. However, with experience, I have learned to be more patient.

× Yes, I think I'm a patient person becauses everything I want to achieve, I wait a long time to achieve it and I don't have a quickly or a fast way to achieve anything.

✓ Yes, I think I'm a patient person because for everything I want to achieve, I wait a long time to achieve it and I don't have a quick or fast way to achieve anything.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. Also, 'quickly' is an adverb but here an adjective 'quick' is needed to describe 'way'. The conjunction 'because' should be followed by a clause explaining the reason, so 'for everything I want to achieve' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× No, I prefer to achieve it in a long term.

✓ No, I prefer to achieve it in the long term.

The phrase 'in a long term' is incorrect because 'term' here is a fixed expression 'in the long term' which requires the definite article 'the' and no indefinite article 'a'.

× I feel impatient when I have to wait for something important, especially if there they lie is the unexpected.

✓ I feel impatient when I have to wait for something important, especially if there is something unexpected.

The phrase 'there they lie is the unexpected' is incorrect and confusing. It should be 'there is something unexpected' to correctly express the idea. 'They lie' is not appropriate here.

× For example, waiting in a long quizzes for or being stuck in traffic can make can make me a restless because I value my time and I want to use it productively.

✓ For example, waiting in long queues or being stuck in traffic can make me restless because I value my time and I want to use it productively.

'a long quizzes' is incorrect because 'quizzes' is plural and 'a' is singular. The correct phrase is 'long queues'. Also, 'make can make me a restless' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'make me restless' without 'a'.

× Additionally, impatience arises winter.

✓ Additionally, impatience arises in winter.

The sentence is missing the preposition 'in' before 'winter' to indicate the time when impatience arises.

× I feel very good because as I mentioned, the I don't mind to take any mission or to achieve any goal in a long time because I also I like that.

✓ I feel very good because, as I mentioned, I don't mind taking any mission or achieving any goal over a long time because I also like that.

The phrase 'the I don't mind to take' is incorrect; 'the' is unnecessary and 'mind' is followed by gerund form, so 'taking' is correct. Also, 'to achieve' should be 'achieving' to match the gerund form after 'mind'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× And the as I mentioned. Also I prefer the long term missions. Rather than short terms.

✓ And as I mentioned, I also prefer long-term missions rather than short-term ones.

The original sentences are fragmented and have incorrect article use. 'the long term missions' should be 'long-term missions' without 'the' unless specific. 'short terms' should be 'short-term ones' to correctly compare missions. The sentence is combined for clarity.

× Yes, uh, actually I haven't worked yet, but I pursued the master degree and they force me to make researches and these researches require a lot of patient patience to to get the right information from right.

✓ Yes, actually I haven't worked yet, but I am pursuing a master's degree and they force me to do research, and this research requires a lot of patience to get the right information.

'pursued' is past tense but the context suggests ongoing action, so 'am pursuing' is correct. 'master degree' should be 'master's degree'. 'make researches' is incorrect; 'do research' is the correct phrase. 'patient patience' is redundant; only 'patience' is needed. 'to to' is a typo. 'from right' is incomplete and removed.

× Of course I am when I was a child.

✓ Of course I wasn't when I was a child.

The sentence contradicts itself; the speaker means they were not patient as a child. The correct past negative form is 'I wasn't' to match 'when I was a child'.

× I think I want everything quickly and. In a thing, I mean toys or something like games on my PC.

✓ I think I wanted everything quickly, like toys or games on my PC.

'I want' should be past tense 'I wanted' to match 'when I was a child'. 'In a thing' is incorrect and unnecessary; it is removed. The sentence is simplified for clarity.

× I don't have the experience of patience, but now I have changed a lot.

✓ I didn't have the experience of patience, but now I have changed a lot.

The sentence refers to past lack of patience, so 'didn't have' is correct instead of 'don't have' to maintain past tense consistency.