耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains some grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, provide a specific example with linking words to make your answer more coherent.

範例: I am not a very patient person because I tend to get frustrated when things take too long. For example, if someone is late, I feel quite annoyed because I value punctuality.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to organize your ideas and provide specific examples. Also, avoid repetition and ensure your sentences are complete and clear.

範例: As I mentioned earlier, I feel impatient when someone is late. For instance, when my sister was late for work, I felt very frustrated and reminded her to be punctual because I dislike waiting.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical errors. Try to complete your sentences and use linking words to contrast your feelings about different tasks. Also, use more precise vocabulary to express your ideas.

範例: It depends on the task. If I find it interesting, I feel energetic and motivated even if it takes a long time. However, if I don't like the task, I become frustrated and lose interest quickly.

建議: Your answer has unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your answer logically, use linking words, and be specific about why patience is important in your job.

範例: Yes, my job at Tim Horton's requires a lot of patience because we serve many customers. Sometimes customers get upset or make mistakes, but we have to remain calm and provide good service to avoid conflicts.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to complete your sentences, use linking words to compare past and present, and provide specific details to explain how your patience has changed.

範例: I am more patient now than when I was a child because my parents used to fulfill all my wishes immediately. However, now I have to wait and work for things on my own, which has taught me patience.

× Actually. I'm not that kind of person who wants everything as quickly as I can.

✓ Actually, I'm not the kind of person who wants everything as quickly as I can.

The original sentence incorrectly uses a period after 'Actually' which breaks the sentence unnaturally. It should be a comma to connect the clauses properly, improving sentence flow and structure.

× if someone gets laid, for example, I get a. Angry.

✓ if someone gets late, for example, I get angry.

The phrase 'gets laid' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'gets late'. Also, 'I get a. Angry.' is fragmented and should be 'I get angry.' to form a correct sentence.

× if someone get leads.

✓ if someone gets late.

The verb 'get' does not agree with the singular subject 'someone'. It should be 'gets'. Also, 'leads' is incorrect; the intended word is 'late'.

× I cannot wait for someone like very long time loss and elect my when my sister was late for the work at the time I was very frustrated and I even scolded him that you should be on time, you should should be patrolled.

✓ I cannot wait for someone for a very long time. When my sister was late for work, I was very frustrated and even scolded her, saying 'You should be on time; you should be punctual.'

The original sentence is fragmented and contains several errors: 'loss and elect my' is nonsensical, 'scolded him' is incorrect as the subject is sister (female), and 'should be patrolled' is incorrect; it should be 'should be punctual'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× I even scolded him that you should be on time, you should should be patrolled.

✓ I even scolded her, saying 'You should be on time; you should be punctual.'

The pronoun 'him' is incorrect when referring to 'my sister'; it should be 'her'. Also, 'should should be patrolled' is a typo and should be 'should be punctual'.

× It up to the task.

✓ It depends on the task.

The phrase 'It up to the task' is incomplete and incorrect. The correct expression is 'It depends on the task' to convey the intended meaning.

× I will very energetic and. Interesting in it,

✓ I will be very energetic and interested in it,

The sentence lacks the verb 'be' after 'will' and uses 'interesting' incorrectly. 'Interesting' is an adjective describing something else; the correct form to describe oneself is 'interested'.

× if The thing is not according to me or I don't like to do the work at all at the time, I feel very frustrated and I.

✓ if the thing is not to my liking or I don't like to do the work at all, at that time, I feel very frustrated.

The phrase 'not according to me' is awkward; 'not to my liking' is more natural. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'and I.' which is incomplete and removed for clarity.

× Now I'm working at Tim Horton's and where we have to serve the customers.

✓ Now I'm working at Tim Hortons where we have to serve customers.

The phrase 'and where' is redundant; 'where' alone suffices. Also, 'the customers' can be simplified to 'customers' unless referring to specific ones.

× So if they got customer gels or not us or do anything wrong.

✓ So if the customers get upset or if we do anything wrong,

The phrase 'customer gels or not us' is unclear and incorrect. It likely means 'customers get upset' or 'if we do anything wrong'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and pronoun use.

× So we have to be patient there that because we cannot create this scene and we have to do our customer service code with patients.

✓ So we have to be patient there because we cannot create a scene and we have to follow our customer service code with patience.

'That because' is incorrect; 'because' alone is sufficient. 'Create this scene' should be 'create a scene'. 'Code with patients' is a typo; it should be 'code with patience'.

× When I was a child my parents used to fill all my train so I didn't have to wait for at that time for anything.

✓ When I was a child, my parents used to fulfill all my needs, so I didn't have to wait for anything at that time.

The phrase 'fill all my train' is incorrect; it should be 'fulfill all my needs'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct word order.

× Like if I wanted to have the toy they used to give me the toy but now they I do have to do anything for me.

✓ For example, if I wanted a toy, they used to give it to me, but now I have to do things for myself.

The sentence has incorrect prepositions and pronouns. 'They I do have to do anything for me' is unclear and corrected to 'I have to do things for myself' to express independence.

× So it's only on me and things takes lots of.

✓ So it's only up to me, and things take a lot of time.

The phrase 'it's only on me' is awkward; 'it's only up to me' is better. 'Things takes lots of' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be 'things take a lot of time'.