零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하게 들리도록 문장을 간결하게 구성하세요. 예를 들어, 'I usually eat snacks when I study because it helps me concentrate, but recently I try to eat less to lose weight.'처럼 말하면 더 효과적입니다.

範例: I usually eat snacks when I study because it helps me concentrate. However, recently I have been trying to eat less to lose weight.

建議: 발음과 문장 구조를 명확히 하여 의사 전달을 개선하세요. 또한, 연결어를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어가면 좋습니다. 예를 들어, 'Eating snacks is not very healthy for me; therefore, I prefer nuts or fruit because they help me stay focused and are healthier.'

範例: Eating snacks is not very healthy for me; therefore, I prefer nuts or fruit because they help me stay focused and are healthier.

建議: 답변을 좀 더 구체적으로 확장하고 연결어를 사용해 자연스럽게 만드세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I did. I often ate snacks when I was tired because they gave me energy to continue playing or studying.'

範例: Yes, I did. I often ate snacks when I was tired because they gave me energy to continue playing or studying.

建議: 단어 선택과 문장 구성을 개선하여 명확하고 자연스럽게 표현하세요. 예를 들어, 'I prefer sweet snacks over savory ones, such as chocolate and candy, because I enjoy their taste more.'

範例: I prefer sweet snacks over savory ones, such as chocolate and candy, because I enjoy their taste more.

× When I'm studying I feel like I have to eat some snacks so and I enjoy it.

✓ When I'm studying, I feel like I have to eat some snacks, and I enjoy it.

The original sentence has a conjunction error and missing commas, which affects sentence clarity. Adding commas and removing the unnecessary 'so' before 'and' improves the sentence structure and flow.

× But nowadays I'm trying to not eat some snack a lot because I try to lose my weight.

✓ But nowadays I'm trying not to eat many snacks because I am trying to lose weight.

The phrase 'some snack a lot' is incorrect. 'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' when referring to quantity, and 'many' is the correct quantifier for countable nouns. Also, 'trying to not eat' is better expressed as 'trying not to eat' for natural English.

× At that door eating snake is not that healthy for me, so if I have to eat snacks I try to eat nuts or fruit because it helps me stay focused more healthy.

✓ At that time, eating snacks is not very healthy for me, so if I have to eat snacks, I try to eat nuts or fruit because they help me stay more focused and healthy.

'At that door' is incorrect; it should be 'at that time'. 'Snake' is a misspelling of 'snack'. Also, 'helps me stay focused more healthy' is awkward; it should be 'help me stay more focused and healthy' with plural pronoun 'they' referring to nuts or fruit.

× Yes I did. I often ate snacks when I was tired.

✓ Yes, I did. I often ate snacks when I was tired.

A comma is needed after 'Yes' for correct punctuation. The rest of the sentence is correct in past tense.

× I like sweet snake then savory because for example like chocolate, some candy.

✓ I like sweet snacks more than savory ones, for example chocolate and some candy.

'Snake' should be 'snacks' (plural). 'Then' is incorrect; it should be 'more than' for comparison. Also, 'like chocolate, some candy' needs to be connected properly to the sentence.

× I prefer the sweet 1.

✓ I prefer the sweet ones.

'1' is incorrect; it should be 'ones' to refer to sweet snacks in plural form.