零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“less a when”不符合英语习惯，且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和表达方式，同时避免冗余。

範例: I usually eat snacks at midnight when I feel very hungry because my family is not willing to cook at that time. Also, some snacks help me satisfy my hunger.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“snack is a junk food”应为“snacks are junk food”，且表达不够自然。建议注意单复数一致，使用更准确的词汇，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: I think eating snacks is unhealthy because they are junk foods high in oil and sugar. Therefore, eating too many snacks can make me gain weight or increase the risk of heart disease.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议使用正确的时态和句型，避免重复和不自然的表达，同时用连接词使句子更流畅。

範例: When I was young, I liked eating snacks such as chocolate and candies. However, my mother often stopped me from eating too much sugar and did not allow me to go to the snack shop or eat sweets at midnight.

建議: 回答中语法错误严重，表达不清晰，且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，使用正确的词汇和语法，表达清楚自己的喜好和原因。

範例: I like potato cheese snacks with a corn flavor because they are crunchy and tasty. However, they are too oily for me, so I try not to eat them often.

× I usually eat less a when I feel very hungry in midnight because my family does not willing to cook some food for midnight and also some of the snack is good for me to fulfill my stomach.

✓ I usually eat less when I feel very hungry at midnight because my family is not willing to cook some food for midnight and also some of the snacks are good for me to fulfill my stomach.

句中“less a”用法错误，应去掉“a”；“midnight”前应加介词“at”；“does not willing”应改为“is not willing”；“some of the snack”应改为复数“some of the snacks”，因为“some”后面应接复数名词。

× my family does not willing to cook some food for midnight

✓ my family is not willing to cook some food for midnight

“does not willing”结构错误，正确表达应为“is not willing”，因为“willing”是形容词，需用系动词“is”连接。

× some of the snack is good for me to fulfill my stomach

✓ some of the snacks are good for me to fulfill my stomach

“some of the snack”应为复数形式“some of the snacks”，且谓语动词应与复数主语一致，使用“are”。

× snack is a junk food which is high oil and sugar

✓ snack is junk food which is high in oil and sugar

“snack”作为不可数名词时不加冠词“a”；“high oil and sugar”表达不完整，应为“high in oil and sugar”。

× The snack can cost me to become fat or get some heart disease.

✓ The snack can cause me to become fat or get some heart disease.

“cost me to become”用法错误，应使用“cause me to become”，表示“导致我变胖”。

× When I was young I would like it for example like chocolate with candies.

✓ When I was young I liked it, for example chocolate and candies.

“would like”时态和语法不当，描述过去习惯应使用过去式“liked”；“for example like”重复，应简化为“for example”。

× my mother always stopped me to eat too much candy

✓ my mother always stopped me from eating too much candy

“stop sb to do sth”错误，正确结构为“stop sb from doing sth”，表示阻止某人做某事。

× she limited me cannot go to the snack shop and cannot eat sugar in the midnight.

✓ she limited me from going to the snack shop and from eating sugar at midnight.

“limited me cannot”结构错误，应使用“limited me from doing”；“in the midnight”应为“at midnight”。

× I like is the potato cheese which flavour is cornstrued also is very crunchy and tasty.

✓ I like the potato cheese which flavor is cornstrued; it is also very crunchy and tasty.

“I like is the potato cheese”结构错误，应为“I like the potato cheese”；“which flavour is cornstrued”表达不清，应为“which flavor is cornstrued”；句子应拆分为两句以表达清楚。

× However it is too high oil for me, therefore I is let it all.

✓ However, it is too high in oil for me, therefore I leave it all.

“too high oil”应为“too high in oil”；“I is let it all”语法错误，应为“I leave it all”。