零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 중복 표현과 어색한 문장 구조를 줄이고, 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 이유를 포함하여 답변을 구성하세요. 예를 들어, 'I usually don't eat snacks because I find them too salty, but I used to enjoy them when I was younger because they made me feel happy.'처럼 간결하고 명확하게 표현하는 것이 좋습니다.

範例: I usually don't eat snacks because I find them too salty. However, when I was younger, I enjoyed eating snacks because they made me feel happy and energetic.

建議: 답변이 반복적이고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 예시를 포함하여 답변을 구성하고, 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 표현하세요. 예를 들어, 'I think the healthiness of snacks depends on their ingredients. For instance, snacks with high salt content are unhealthy, but those made with natural ingredients can be healthy.'처럼 표현할 수 있습니다.

範例: I think the healthiness of snacks depends on their ingredients. For example, snacks that are high in salt or sugar are unhealthy, but those made with natural ingredients like nuts or fruits can be healthy options.

建議: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 간결하고 명확한 주제 문장과 이유를 포함하여 답변을 구성하세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because they made me feel good, and I was not aware that they might be unhealthy.'처럼 표현하는 것이 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because they made me feel happy. At that time, I didn't know that snacks could be unhealthy.

建議: 답변이 매우 어색하고 문법 오류가 많으며, 의미 전달이 불분명합니다. 좋아하는 간식에 대해 명확하게 말하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 예를 들어, 'I like unsalted nuts because I don't enjoy salty foods, and I want to maintain a healthy lifestyle.'처럼 간결하고 명확하게 표현하세요.

範例: I like unsalted nuts because I don't enjoy salty foods. I choose them because I want to take care of my health, which is very important to me.

× I don't usually eat snacks because I don't like that snacks really.

✓ I don't usually eat snacks because I don't really like those snacks.

The pronoun 'that' is incorrectly used to refer to plural 'snacks'; it should be 'those' to correctly refer to plural items at a distance. Also, the adverb 'really' should be placed before 'like' for correct emphasis.

× I think snacks taste really salt salty so I don't like it.

✓ I think snacks taste really salty, so I don't like them.

The adjective 'salt' is incorrectly used; the correct adjective is 'salty'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'snacks'. A comma is needed before 'so' to separate clauses.

× But when I was young I really like snacks because it makes me feel good.

✓ But when I was young, I really liked snacks because they made me feel good.

The verb tense should be past tense 'liked' and 'made' to match 'when I was young'. The pronoun 'it' should be 'they' to refer to plural 'snacks'. A comma is needed after the introductory clause.

× It depends on the snacks ingredient because some snacks are really salty but some is very tasty and healthy.

✓ It depends on the snack ingredients because some snacks are really salty but some are very tasty and healthy.

'Snacks ingredient' should be plural 'snack ingredients' to refer to multiple components. Also, 'some is' should be 'some are' to agree with plural 'snacks'.

× So I think it's it depends on ingredients.

✓ So I think it depends on the ingredients.

The phrase 'it's it depends' is redundant and incorrect; it should be simplified to 'it depends'. Also, 'the' is needed before 'ingredients'.

× I don't know why snacks is snacks are unhealthy so I just eat I can buy that and snacks is more simple so I like it.

✓ I don't know why snacks are unhealthy, so I just eat them when I can buy them, and snacks are simpler, so I like them.

'Snacks' is plural, so verbs should be 'are' not 'is'. Pronouns referring to 'snacks' should be 'them'. 'More simple' should be 'simpler' for correct comparative form.

× I like Samsonites made by no salt because I don't like salty foods so I just want a healthy 1 so because I I think in to care my health is important in my life so.

✓ I like snacks made without salt because I don't like salty foods, so I just want a healthy one because I think taking care of my health is important in my life.

'Samsonites' is likely a mishearing or misspelling; corrected to 'snacks'. 'Made by no salt' should be 'made without salt'. '1' should be spelled out as 'one'. The phrase 'in to care my health' should be 'taking care of my health'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.