零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more coherent and avoid repetition. Also, clarify your daily schedule more clearly and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

範例: I usually eat snacks around 4:00 PM because it's the only free time I have before work. I start work at 4:30 PM and finish at 2:00 AM, so I have a snack to keep me energized before my shift.

建議: Avoid redundancy and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to contrast ideas and be more specific about the types of snacks you consider healthy or unhealthy.

範例: It depends on the snacks I choose. For instance, light snacks like brown bread are healthy, whereas processed packet foods are definitely unhealthy.

建議: Reduce filler words and hesitations to make your answer sound more natural. Provide clearer descriptions and use linking words to organize your ideas better.

範例: I loved eating snacks when I was young. For example, there was a snack called Chip Chip Scuddle, which is still available today. My favourite flavour was the green one, an American flavour that I still enjoy.

建議: Improve grammar by matching singular/plural forms and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and be more specific about why you like these snacks.

範例: I prefer quick and convenient snacks that don't take much time to prepare. For example, I often eat roasted peanuts or brown bread with peanut butter because they are tasty, filling, and save time. Additionally, I sometimes eat rice cakes on my way to work since they are easy to carry.

× I usually have my snacks around 4:00 PM. It is the only time that I that I have that I'm free.

✓ I usually have my snacks around 4:00 PM. It is the only time that I am free.

The sentence contains a repetition error with 'that I that I have' which disrupts sentence structure. Removing the repeated phrase improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I work from 4:30 until 2:00 and after that when I come back home I have my lunch and then I go to sleep after waking up.

✓ I work from 4:30 until 2:00, and after I come back home, I have my lunch and then I go to sleep after waking up.

The original sentence lacks proper punctuation and has awkward phrasing. Adding commas and rephrasing 'after that when I come back home' to 'after I come back home' improves sentence flow and clarity.

× Well, it depends upon the type of snacks that I'm eating.

✓ Well, it depends on the type of snacks that I'm eating.

The phrase 'depends upon' is less common and 'depends on' is the standard preposition used with 'depend' in this context, making the sentence more natural.

× If I'm eating just not a white or a brown bread or something very light that is healthy, then it is definitely definitely healthy for me.

✓ If I'm eating just white or brown bread or something very light that is healthy, then it is definitely healthy for me.

The use of 'a white or a brown bread' is incorrect because 'bread' is an uncountable noun here and does not require an article. Also, the repetition of 'definitely' is redundant.

× As for the other snacks, if I'm munching on something like a packet food, then it definitely is not healthy.

✓ As for other snacks, if I'm munching on something like packaged food, then it definitely is not healthy.

'Packet food' is not a standard phrase; 'packaged food' is correct. Also, 'the other snacks' is better as 'other snacks' for general reference.

× I used to love snacks a lot. For example, uh, when I was young, uh, there was this chip chip scuddle, which is still available in the market, umm, at the moment.

✓ I used to love snacks a lot. For example, when I was young, there was this chip called 'Chip Scuddle', which is still available in the market at the moment.

The phrase 'chip chip scuddle' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or repetition. Clarifying it as 'chip called Chip Scuddle' improves clarity. Also, removing filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' makes the sentence cleaner.

× Uh, my favorite snacks uh, flavor was the green flavor.

✓ My favorite snack flavor was the green flavor.

'Snacks flavor' is incorrect; it should be 'snack flavor' as 'flavor' modifies 'snack' in singular form. Also, removing filler words improves clarity.

× That was an American flavor and I still find it very delicious until this day.

✓ That was an American flavor, and I still find it very delicious to this day.

The phrase 'until this day' is less common; 'to this day' is the correct idiomatic expression. Adding a comma before 'and' improves sentence structure.

× I usually like to eat quick and convenient snacks that doesn't make a that doesn't take enough time to prepare.

✓ I usually like to eat quick and convenient snacks that don't take much time to prepare.

The relative pronoun 'that' refers to 'snacks' which is plural, so the verb should be 'don't' not 'doesn't'. Also, 'make a that doesn't take enough time' is awkward and redundant; simplifying to 'don't take much time' is clearer.

× For example, I often have roasted peanuts or brown bread with peanut butter because they're both tasty and feeding and they're time saving as well.

✓ For example, I often have roasted peanuts or brown bread with peanut butter because they're both tasty and filling, and they're time-saving as well.

The word 'feeding' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'filling'. Also, 'time saving' should be hyphenated as 'time-saving' when used as an adjective.

× Sometimes I also love to eat rice cakes on my way to the work since they are very easy to carry.

✓ Sometimes I also love to eat rice cakes on my way to work since they are very easy to carry.

The phrase 'to the work' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to work' without 'the' when referring to going to one's job.