零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中时态使用不准确，应该用现在时描述现在的习惯。此外，句子结构不够自然，建议简化表达并避免重复。可以直接说“I usually eat snacks when I feel down because they can boost my mood quickly.”

範例: I usually eat snacks when I feel down because they can boost my mood quickly.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用简单句表达观点，并用连接词使句子更连贯。例如：“Snacks are not very healthy, but I control how often I eat them to avoid health problems.”

範例: Snacks are not very healthy, but I control how often I eat them to avoid health problems.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和重复词，且表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，注意时态和词形变化。例如：“I did not eat snacks often because my parents controlled when I could eat them, as they thought snacks were bad for my health.”

範例: I did not eat snacks often because my parents controlled when I could eat them, as they thought snacks were bad for my health.

建議: 回答中时态使用不准确，且表达略显简单。建议使用正确的时态并丰富细节，例如：“In the past, I often ate oily foods like hamburgers and chips. But now, I prefer sweet snacks such as cake and chocolate.”

範例: In the past, I often ate oily foods like hamburgers and chips. But now, I prefer sweet snacks such as cake and chocolate.

× I usually eat snacks when I was when I was feel down.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I feel down.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. 'Usually' indicates a habitual action in the present, so 'was' and 'was feel' should be corrected to present tense 'feel'.

× It may boost my mood in a short time.

✓ It can boost my mood in a short time.

'May' indicates possibility, but 'can' is more appropriate here to express ability or effect. Using 'can' makes the sentence clearer and more natural.

× Each snacks absolutely have not healthy for for my body, but I can control how often I eat them to prevent to prevent the snacks let me this problem.

✓ Each snack is absolutely not healthy for my body, but I can control how often I eat them to prevent the snacks from causing this problem.

'Each' is followed by a singular noun 'snack', not plural 'snacks'. Also, 'have' should be 'is' to agree with singular subject. The phrase 'prevent to prevent' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'prevent the snacks from causing'.

× Uh, not often because when I was a child my parents often control the, uh, control the times I eating the snacks because they think eating snacks was bad for my healthy.

✓ Uh, not often because when I was a child my parents often controlled the times I ate snacks because they thought eating snacks was bad for my health.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. Since the time is in the past ('when I was a child'), verbs should be in past tense: 'control' to 'controlled', 'eating' to 'ate', 'think' to 'thought', and 'healthy' should be 'health' as a noun.

× In the past I often eat some food like hamburgers, chips and so on, which contains higher oil.

✓ In the past I often ate foods like hamburgers, chips and so on, which contain more oil.

Since the action is in the past, 'eat' should be 'ate'. 'Food' should be plural 'foods' to match 'like hamburgers, chips'. 'Contains' should be 'contain' to agree with plural 'foods'. 'Higher oil' is unnatural; 'more oil' is correct.

× But now I like to eat some sweet food like cake and chocolate.

✓ But now I like to eat some sweet foods like cake and chocolate.

'Food' should be plural 'foods' when referring to multiple types like cake and chocolate. This makes the sentence more natural and grammatically correct.