零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp hơn và tránh những câu không rõ nghĩa như "because it helps us to write after a long lesson". Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để làm câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I usually eat snacks when I'm hanging out with my friends, especially after classes. For example, we often eat fried potatoes because they are tasty and easy to share.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý phát âm và ngữ pháp, tránh lỗi sai như "snakes" thay vì "snacks". Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh những câu không hoàn chỉnh như "Come from where?".

範例: No, I don't think snacks are healthy because they usually contain a lot of oil and unknown ingredients. However, people eat them because they are convenient, fast, and affordable.

建議: Câu trả lời có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như "opened a snacks". Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và chính xác hơn để truyền đạt ý tưởng.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially after I got my pocket money. I used it to hang out with my friends and buy fast food like burgers and fries.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý chính tả và ngữ pháp, ví dụ như "the most favorable 1" nên là "the most favorite one" và "aren't the perfect pints" nên là "are the perfect snacks". Hãy sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi chính tả.

範例: I like a variety of snacks, but my favorite is fried potatoes. They are affordable for me as a student, tasty, easy to find, and perfect to eat between classes.

× So I usually eat snacks when I'm hanging out with my friends, especially after the lessons we had to learn.

✓ So I usually eat snacks when I hang out with my friends, especially after the lessons we have to learn.

The phrase 'I'm hanging out' uses the present continuous tense, which is not appropriate for habitual actions. For habitual actions, the simple present tense 'I hang out' should be used. Also, 'lessons we had to learn' should be 'lessons we have to learn' to indicate ongoing or general lessons.

× For example, we usually eat fried potatoes because it helps us to write after a long lesson.

✓ For example, we usually eat fried potatoes because they help us to write after a long lesson.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'fried potatoes', which is plural. The correct pronoun is 'they' to agree with the plural noun.

× Obviously no. To be fair, snakes itself have a lot of oil and we don't know the ingredients in them.

✓ Obviously no. To be fair, snacks themselves have a lot of oil and we don't know the ingredients in them.

The word 'snakes' is a misspelling of 'snacks'. Also, 'itself' is singular and should be 'themselves' to agree with the plural noun 'snacks'.

× Come from where? But however people tend to eat it as is convenience, fast and affordable.

✓ Where do they come from? However, people tend to eat them because they are convenient, fast, and affordable.

The sentence 'Come from where?' is incomplete and should be rephrased as a question 'Where do they come from?'. 'But however' is redundant; only one conjunction is needed. 'Eat it' should be 'eat them' to agree with plural 'snacks'. 'As is convenience' is incorrect; it should be 'because they are convenient'.

× Yes, I opened a snacks when I was young, especially around 3 or 4 years ago when I first received my pocket money.

✓ Yes, I ate snacks when I was young, especially around 3 or 4 years ago when I first received my pocket money.

The verb 'opened' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'ate' to describe consuming snacks. Also, 'a snacks' is incorrect because 'snacks' is plural and does not take 'a'.

× I used that money to hang out with my friends and eat out with them, mostly fast food like burgers or fries.

✓ I used that money to hang out with my friends and eat out, mostly fast food like burgers or fries.

The phrase 'eat out with them' is redundant because 'hang out with my friends' already implies their company. 'Eat out' is sufficient without 'with them'.

× So in general I enjoy a variety of snacks but the most favorable 1 is fried potatoes.

✓ So in general I enjoy a variety of snacks but the most favorite one is fried potatoes.

The phrase 'most favorable 1' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'most favorite one' to indicate preference. Also, 'favorable' is not appropriate here; 'favorite' is the correct adjective.

× Besides that they are easy to find and aren't the perfect pints to eat between classes.

✓ Besides that, they are easy to find and are the perfect snacks to eat between classes.

The word 'pints' is a misspelling; it should be 'snacks'. Also, 'aren't the perfect pints' is incorrect; the sentence should affirm that they are perfect snacks. Added comma after 'Besides that' for clarity.