零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say "I usually eat snacks while watching television or reading comics because I find these activities entertaining."

範例: I usually eat snacks while watching television or reading comics because I find these activities entertaining.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but contains some errors and unclear vocabulary. For example, "ointment" is incorrect in this context. Also, avoid repeating "healthier snacks" twice. Use linking words like "however" to contrast ideas and be specific with examples.

範例: I think it depends on the type of snacks. For example, I enjoy chips, which are not very healthy. However, healthier options like nuts or dried fruits are better choices.

建議: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors and is a bit repetitive. Use past tense consistently and avoid filler words like "umm." Also, use linking words such as "because" and "and" to connect your reasons clearly.

範例: No, I didn't often eat snacks when I was young because I didn't have much money, and my parents didn't allow me to eat many snacks.

建議: Your answer is clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more concise. Avoid repeating phrases and use linking words like "because" to explain your preferences. Also, say "onion flavor" instead of "onion favorite."

範例: I like eating chips, especially onion flavor, because they smell good and are very crispy. I enjoy eating them while watching TV.

× I usually eat snacks when I am watching television or reading comics doing some entertainment activities.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I am watching television, reading comics, or doing some entertainment activities.

The original sentence lacks proper conjunctions and punctuation to separate the activities, causing confusion. Adding commas and 'or' clarifies the list of activities and improves sentence flow.

× it's definitely not a healthy snacks.

✓ it's definitely not a healthy snack.

The word 'snacks' is plural, but 'a' indicates singular. The correct singular form 'snack' should be used to match the article 'a'.

× But instead of chips we can choose some healthier snacks like ointment or some dried fruit.

✓ But instead of chips, we can choose some healthier snacks like yogurt or some dried fruit.

The word 'ointment' is incorrect in this context; likely the intended word is 'yogurt', a common healthy snack. Also, a comma after 'chips' improves readability.

× No, I don't really eat snacks when I was young because first of all I don't have the money to buy so much snacks when I was young and 2nd is that umm my parents and my families do not allow me to eat so much snacks when I was a kid.

✓ No, I didn't really eat snacks when I was young because, first of all, I didn't have the money to buy so many snacks when I was young, and secondly, my parents and my family did not allow me to eat so many snacks when I was a kid.

The sentence mixes present tense ('don't') with past time references ('when I was young'). The verbs should be in past tense to match the time frame. Also, 'so much snacks' should be 'so many snacks' because 'snacks' is countable.

× I don't have the money to buy so much snacks when I was young

✓ I didn't have the money to buy so many snacks when I was young

'Snacks' is a countable noun, so 'many' should be used instead of 'much' which is for uncountable nouns.

× my parents and my families do not allow me to eat so much snacks when I was a kid.

✓ my parents and my family did not allow me to eat so many snacks when I was a kid.

'Families' is plural but here it should be singular 'family' to refer collectively. Also, 'so much snacks' should be 'so many snacks' because 'snacks' is countable.

× I think it give me a good smell and it's also very crispy to eat it.

✓ I think it gives me a good smell and it's also very crispy to eat.

The verb 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with the third person singular subject 'it'. Also, 'to eat it' is redundant; 'to eat' suffices.