零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami serta singkat. Hindari pengulangan dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

範例: I usually eat snacks before going to sleep and also while studying to prevent boredom.

建議: Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Jelaskan alasan dengan lebih spesifik dan hindari kalimat yang membingungkan.

範例: Yes, I think eating snacks can be healthy if we choose the right ones. For example, the WHO and Indonesia's Ministry of Health recommend having two healthy snacks a day between main meals.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat kalimat lebih lengkap dan jelas. Jelaskan jenis camilan yang dimaksud dan perasaan Anda dengan lebih terstruktur.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, but unfortunately, they were usually unhealthy, like chips or sweets. Now, I regret those choices.

建議: Gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan jelas. Jelaskan alasan memilih camilan tersebut dengan kalimat yang terstruktur dan tanpa pengulangan.

範例: Currently, I prefer healthy snacks like fruits, vegetable salads, or fresh juice because they are good for my heart and overall health.

× I usually consume a snack before I was sleep, before I was sleep and then after during my study.

✓ I usually consume a snack before I sleep, before I sleep and then during my study.

The phrase 'before I was sleep' is incorrect because 'sleep' is a verb that should be in the present tense here to indicate habitual action. The past tense 'was sleep' is grammatically incorrect; the correct form is 'before I sleep'. Penggunaan 'was sleep' salah karena 'sleep' harus dalam bentuk present tense untuk menunjukkan kebiasaan.

× Then to to prevent that I get bored when I studied so I consume a snack.

✓ Then to prevent that I get bored when I study, I consume a snack.

The verb 'studied' is in the past tense, but the sentence refers to a habitual action, so the present tense 'study' should be used. Mixing past tense with habitual action causes confusion. Penggunaan 'studied' salah karena kalimat ini menggambarkan kebiasaan, sehingga harus menggunakan present tense 'study'.

× Yes, I think that's healthy because WHO organization and a Ministry of Health in Indonesia recommend us to have a minimum 2 snack per day and we bought a meals, heavy meals and that's healthy based on that snacks that you choose.

✓ Yes, I think that's healthy because the WHO organization and the Ministry of Health in Indonesia recommend us to have a minimum of 2 snacks per day, and we eat meals, heavy meals, and that's healthy based on the snacks that you choose.

The phrase 'a minimum 2 snack' is incorrect; it should be 'a minimum of 2 snacks' because 'snack' is countable and plural is needed. Also, 'bought a meals' is incorrect; it should be 'eat meals'. Articles 'the' are needed before 'WHO organization' and 'Ministry of Health'. Penggunaan 'a minimum 2 snack' salah, harus 'a minimum of 2 snacks' karena 'snack' dapat dihitung dan harus jamak. 'bought a meals' salah, harus 'eat meals'. Artikel 'the' diperlukan sebelum 'WHO organization' dan 'Ministry of Health'.

× Yeah, when I was young, I often I frequently ate snack, consumer snack like, but sadly it's not a healthy snack.

✓ Yeah, when I was young, I often frequently ate snacks, consumed snacks like, but sadly they were not healthy snacks.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to multiple items. 'Consumer' is incorrect; the past tense verb 'consumed' is correct. Also, 'it's not a healthy snack' should be 'they were not healthy snacks' to agree with plural subject and past tense. 'Snack' harus jamak 'snacks'. 'Consumer' salah, harus 'consumed'. 'It's not a healthy snack' harus 'they were not healthy snacks' untuk kesesuaian jamak dan past tense.

× And I was disappointed right now when I when I remember that I had maybe like a cheeky or.

✓ And I am disappointed right now when I remember that I had maybe something like a cheeky snack.

The phrase 'I was disappointed right now' mixes past tense 'was' with 'right now' which indicates present. It should be 'I am disappointed right now'. Also, 'when I when I remember' has repetition and 'like a cheeky or' is incomplete; it should be 'something like a cheeky snack'. 'Was' tidak cocok dengan 'right now' yang menunjukkan waktu sekarang, harus 'am'. Pengulangan 'when I when I' salah dan frasa tidak lengkap harus diperbaiki.

× Right now I consume a snack like a fruit or a vegetable salad or juice or something like that, that I, I think that's healthy because it was for a good heart for me.

✓ Right now I consume snacks like fruit, vegetable salad, or juice, or something like that, which I think are healthy because they are good for my heart.

'A snack like a fruit or a vegetable salad or juice' should be plural 'snacks like fruit, vegetable salad, or juice' because these are countable items. 'That I, I think that's healthy' is awkward; better to say 'which I think are healthy'. 'It was for a good heart' is incorrect tense and subject; should be 'they are good for my heart'. Penggunaan tunggal harus diganti jamak. Struktur kalimat harus diperbaiki agar lebih jelas dan sesuai dengan subjek jamak dan present tense.