零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'together' and clarify relationships (siblings vs cousins). Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I usually eat snacks while watching movies with my siblings because it's fun to spend time together. We often have potato chips and drinks during these occasions.

建議: Try to make your sentences clearer and avoid repetition like 'it can it can'. Use linking words to explain reasons logically. Also, be careful with grammar and word order for clarity.

範例: I think eating snacks is unhealthy because they contain added saturated fats and high carbohydrates, which can negatively affect health. Therefore, children should avoid eating them often and limit their intake.

建議: Your answer is relevant but needs better grammar and sentence structure. Use past tense consistently and avoid singular/plural mismatches. Add linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because my parents were workaholics. Since they had to go to work early, they didn't have time to prepare breakfast, so they gave me money to buy food from the store.

建議: Avoid repetition like 'I would I would' and use correct singular/plural forms. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural. Also, explain why you like the snack more clearly.

範例: I usually like to eat spicy potato chips because I enjoy their flavor. They are my favorite snack, and I often share them with my siblings along with some soft drinks at home.

× I usually eat snacks while watching movie with my siblings because it is fun to be together with cousins and watching movies together.

✓ I usually eat snacks while watching movies with my siblings because it is fun to be together with cousins and watch movies together.

The word 'movie' should be plural 'movies' because it refers to multiple instances. Also, after 'and', the verb should be in base form 'watch' to parallel 'to be'.

× We eat potato chips and drinks.

✓ We eat potato chips and drink beverages.

The word 'drinks' is plural but used incorrectly here; 'drink beverages' or 'drink drinks' is awkward. Better to say 'drink beverages' or 'have drinks'.

× I think it is not healthy to eat snacks because it has added saturated fats, high carbohydrate, it can it can affect your health.

✓ I think it is not healthy to eat snacks because they have added saturated fats and high carbohydrates; they can affect your health.

'Snacks' is plural, so pronouns and verbs referring to it should be plural ('they have'). Also, 'carbohydrate' should be plural 'carbohydrates' to match 'fats'.

× It should be avoided often to eat and limited to for children.

✓ Eating them should be avoided often and limited for children.

The original sentence has incorrect preposition use and awkward structure. 'Eating them' is the subject, and 'should be avoided often and limited for children' is the predicate.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young because my parents are a workaholic person.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because my parents were workaholic people.

The past tense 'ate' should be used to match 'when I was young'. Also, 'parents' is plural, so 'are' should be 'were' and 'person' should be plural 'people'.

× They have to go to work and they didn't have the time to make a breakfast or food for me.

✓ They had to go to work and didn't have the time to make breakfast or food for me.

The past tense 'had' should be used to match the past context. Also, 'a breakfast' is incorrect; 'breakfast' is uncountable and does not need an article.

× That is why they always gave me money to buy foods from store.

✓ That is why they always gave me money to buy food from the store.

'Food' is uncountable and should not be pluralized as 'foods'. Also, 'the store' needs the definite article 'the'.

× I usually eat potato chips because of its spiciness.

✓ I usually eat potato chips because of their spiciness.

'Potato chips' is plural, so the possessive pronoun should be 'their' instead of 'its'.

× Potato chip is my cup of tea.

✓ Potato chips are my cup of tea.

'Potato chips' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'.

× I would I would eat them a lot at my home, sharing with my siblings with some drinks, soft drinks.

✓ I would eat them a lot at home, sharing with my siblings some soft drinks.

The repeated phrase 'I would' is redundant. Also, 'sharing with my siblings with some drinks' is awkward; better to say 'sharing with my siblings some soft drinks'.