零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevabınızda kendinizi ifade ederken daha akıcı ve doğal cümleler kurmaya çalışmalısınız. Ayrıca, gereksiz tekrarları azaltarak cevabınızı daha etkili hale getirebilirsiniz. Örneğin, neden nadiren atıştırdığınızı açık ve net bir şekilde belirtin.

範例: I usually avoid eating snacks because once I start, it's hard for me to stop. Therefore, I rarely eat them these days.

建議: Cevabınızda düşüncelerinizi daha açık ve mantıklı bir şekilde ifade etmelisiniz. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi tamamlayarak ve gereksiz tekrarları kaldırarak daha anlaşılır olabilirsiniz.

範例: I don't think snacks are healthy because they often contain many chemicals and preservatives to keep them fresh.

建議: Cevabınızda daha tutarlı ve akıcı cümleler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, neden eskiden daha çok atıştırdığınızı ve şimdi neden yemediğinizi daha net açıklayabilirsiniz.

範例: Yes, I used to eat a lot of snacks when I was younger because I didn't know they were unhealthy. However, now I prefer to avoid them.

建議: Cevabınızda neden belirli atıştırmalıkları sevdiğinizi daha açık ve mantıklı bir şekilde ifade edin. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi tamamlayarak ve tekrarları azaltarak daha doğal bir konuşma yapabilirsiniz.

範例: I like eating chocolate and chips because they taste good, although I know they contain chemicals that can be addictive.

× I don't like to eat snacks because when I started to eat snacks, I cannot stop myself.

✓ I don't like to eat snacks because when I start to eat snacks, I cannot stop myself.

The sentence mixes past tense 'started' with present tense context. Since the statement is about a habitual action, present tense 'start' should be used instead of past tense 'started'.

× That's why I'm trying to not eat snacks.

✓ That's why I'm trying not to eat snacks.

The phrase 'trying to not eat' is awkward; the correct form is 'trying not to eat' because 'not' should come before the infinitive verb to express negation properly.

× That's a real that's why I eat almost never.

✓ That's the real reason why I almost never eat snacks.

The original sentence is fragmented and incorrectly structured. The correction clarifies the meaning and places the adverb 'almost never' correctly before the verb 'eat'.

× I don't, I don't think they are healthy because they contain a lot of a lot of chemicals in it because they had to, they had to save them because of they, they put them in a jam and they had to put them.

✓ I don't think they are healthy because they contain a lot of chemicals. They have to preserve them, so they put preservatives in them.

The original sentence is confusing and uses incorrect prepositions and phrasing. 'Contain a lot of chemicals in it' is redundant; 'contain a lot of chemicals' is correct. Also, 'because of they' is incorrect; it should be 'because they'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I used to eat snacks when I was younger because I didn't know they were.

✓ Yes, I used to eat snacks when I was younger because I didn't know they were unhealthy.

The sentence is incomplete; 'they were' needs an adjective to complete the meaning. Adding 'unhealthy' completes the thought and corrects the sentence.

× I like to eat chocolate and chips more because I guess they have some chemicals in it and they make us addicted to them.

✓ I like to eat chocolate and chips more because I guess they have some chemicals in them and they make us addicted to them.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to plural nouns 'chocolate and chips'; it should be 'them' to agree in number.