零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to combine your ideas into fewer sentences to avoid redundancy and improve fluency. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect your thoughts smoothly. Also, avoid short incomplete sentences such as 'Even though I know they're not very healthy.' Instead, make it a complete sentence to sound more natural.

範例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon or late at night because I feel a bit hungry, and I love crunchy treats like chips since they satisfy my cravings, even though I know they're not very healthy.

建議: Make your answer more coherent by linking your ideas and avoiding fragmented sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to show contrast. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary, for example, 'nutritional value' instead of 'nutritional values' and 'cause' instead of 'give' for indigestion.

範例: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they contain little nutritional value and are mostly made up of salt and carbohydrates, which can cause indigestion; however, eating snacks occasionally won't harm you.

建議: Avoid repeating ideas and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' properly to connect your ideas. Also, try to be more specific and clear in your descriptions. For instance, instead of 'like salty taste,' say 'a distinct salty flavor.'

範例: Yes, I loved eating snacks when I was a child and still do because I enjoy the distinct flavors of different snacks; for example, nuts have a salty taste that I like to munch on.

建議: Try to complete your sentences and avoid awkward phrasing. Use linking words like 'because' and 'and' to connect your ideas clearly. Also, be careful with word choice and grammar, for example, 'the crunch it sounds' should be 'the crunchy sound they make.'

範例: I like eating junk food and mixed nuts because I enjoy the crunchy sound they make when I bite them, and I also appreciate that I can eat them in small amounts frequently without feeling too full.

× Even though I know they're not very healthy.

✓ Even though I know they're not very healthy,

This sentence is a dependent clause and cannot stand alone. It needs to be connected to an independent clause to form a complete sentence. Adding a comma indicates continuation and improves sentence structure.

× No, because they have no nutritional values.

✓ No, because they have no nutritional value.

The word 'value' in this context is uncountable and should not be pluralized. Using 'value' instead of 'values' is grammatically correct.

× They're just made-up of pure salt and carbohydrates.

✓ They're just made up of pure salt and carbohydrates.

The phrase 'made up of' should not have a hyphen. 'Made-up' as a hyphenated word is an adjective, but here it functions as a verb phrase and should be written without a hyphen.

× That will give me bad indigestion.

✓ That gives me bad indigestion.

Using 'will' implies future tense, but the sentence refers to a general truth or habitual result. Present simple tense is appropriate here.

× But you know, sometimes it won't hurt you eating snacks.

✓ But you know, sometimes it won't hurt you to eat snacks.

The verb 'hurt' followed by another verb requires the infinitive form 'to eat' rather than the gerund 'eating' after 'won't hurt you'.

× For example, nuts, they have this distinct taste, like salty taste and then I'll just munch on it.

✓ For example, nuts have this distinct taste, like a salty taste, and then I'll just munch on them.

The sentence has redundancy and pronoun disagreement. 'Nuts' is plural, so 'them' should be used instead of 'it'. Also, 'like salty taste' should be 'like a salty taste' for correct article usage.

× I love eating junk food and mixed nuts because I love the crunch it sounds whenever I bite them and or munch them and also I love that you can eat them in a small amount and you can eat them frequently without the.

✓ I love eating junk food and mixed nuts because I love the crunch sound whenever I bite or munch them, and also I love that you can eat them in small amounts and eat them frequently without any problem.

The original sentence has several issues: 'crunch it sounds' is incorrect; it should be 'crunch sound'. 'Bite them and or munch them' is awkward; 'bite or munch them' is better. 'In a small amount' should be 'in small amounts' for quantifier correctness. The sentence ends abruptly with 'without the.' which is incomplete; adding 'without any problem' completes the thought.