零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to keep your response concise and avoid repeating phrases like 'eating snacks'. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words such as 'usually' or 'for example'.

範例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon, especially when I take a break from my household chores. For example, I like to have some light snacks with tea while watching my favourite series on TV. This helps me relax before having a heavy dinner at night.

建議: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical errors which affect clarity. Try to use simple and clear sentences. Also, use linking words like 'however' or 'for example' to connect your ideas logically. Avoid vague expressions like 'savvy day' and focus on clear reasons and examples.

範例: I think it depends on what kind of snacks you eat. For example, eating unhealthy snacks every day can harm your health. However, choosing healthy options like gluten-free or sugar-free cookies can be beneficial.

建議: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases which make it difficult to understand. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct verb tenses and avoid unnecessary words. Also, use linking words like 'for example' or 'because' to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I used to eat snacks often when I was young. Every day, my mother gave me some money before school, so I would buy snacks like sauces or fast food from the canteen during breaks.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear due to incorrect word usage and grammar. Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Also, use linking words like 'although' and 'instead of' properly to make your answer more natural and coherent.

範例: Nowadays, I prefer healthy snacks. For example, I recently started eating papdi chaat, which contains yogurt, sauces, and beetroot. Although it is not very healthy, I choose it instead of oily snacks like pakoras.

× I usually eat snacks in the afternoon or whenever I get a free time from my household chores.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the afternoon or whenever I get free time from my household chores.

The phrase 'a free time' is incorrect because 'time' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by the indefinite article 'a'. The correct phrase is 'free time'.

× Most of the time I prefer to eat snacks with the tea while watching something on the TV or my favorite up series on my phone eating snacks.

✓ Most of the time I prefer to eat snacks with tea while watching something on TV or my favorite series on my phone while eating snacks.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'tea' and 'TV' in this context. Also, 'favorite up series' is incorrect; it should be 'favorite series'. The phrase 'on the TV' is better as 'on TV'. The sentence structure is improved by adding 'while' before 'eating snacks' to clarify the action.

× We do get to relax and the lightweight food for us before having a heavy dinner at night.

✓ We get to relax and have lightweight food before having a heavy dinner at night.

The original sentence is awkward and incomplete. 'The lightweight food for us' is incorrect; it should be 'have lightweight food'. The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary here. The corrected sentence is clearer and grammatically correct.

× If you are eating a savvy day for a continuous period of time, it will definitely hamper your bad health.

✓ If you are eating snacks every day for a continuous period of time, it will definitely harm your health.

The phrase 'a savvy day' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'snacks every day'. Also, 'hamper your bad health' is incorrect; 'harm your health' is the correct expression. 'Bad health' is redundant here.

× And inside the of eating snacks, you can also use some healthy things to combine with it.

✓ And instead of eating unhealthy snacks, you can also use some healthy things to combine with them.

The phrase 'inside the of eating snacks' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'instead of eating unhealthy snacks'. Also, 'combine with it' should be 'combine with them' to agree with the plural 'snacks'.

× For example, you can have some cookies which are gluten free or sugar free to eat as a snack.

✓ For example, you can have some cookies that are gluten-free or sugar-free to eat as a snack.

The phrase 'which are' is acceptable but 'that are' is more common in restrictive clauses. Also, 'gluten free' and 'sugar free' should be hyphenated as 'gluten-free' and 'sugar-free' when used as adjectives before a noun.

× I think so yes, I used to eat a lot of snacks when I was a young.

✓ I think so, yes, I used to eat a lot of snacks when I was young.

The phrase 'when I was a young' is incorrect; 'young' is an adjective and does not need an article here. The correct phrase is 'when I was young'.

× I remember that my mother used to give me a money when on every day when I got ready for my school.

✓ I remember that my mother used to give me money every day when I got ready for school.

'A money' is incorrect because 'money' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article. Also, 'on every day' is redundant; 'every day' is sufficient. 'My school' can be simplified to 'school'.

× So in the break I visit to my canteen eating smooth sauce or some fast food Asha snacks.

✓ So during the break, I visit my canteen to eat samosas or some fast food as snacks.

The original sentence has several errors: 'in the break' should be 'during the break'; 'visit to my canteen' should be 'visit my canteen'; 'eating smooth sauce' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo, corrected to 'eat samosas'; 'Asha snacks' is unclear and replaced with 'as snacks' for clarity.

× Nowadays I like some healthy snacks.

✓ Nowadays, I like healthy snacks.

The word 'some' is unnecessary here and can be omitted for a more natural sentence.

× I just start papiadini Bola, even they are not as much healthy but I prefer to eat them as they have some yogurt in it along with some sauces, beetroot on the top of it that is quite healthy.

✓ I just started papdi chaat; even though it is not very healthy, I prefer to eat it because it has some yogurt along with sauces and beetroot on top, which is quite healthy.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'start' should be past tense 'started'; 'papiadini Bola' is likely 'papdi chaat'; 'not as much healthy' should be 'not very healthy'; 'some yogurt in it' is correct but 'some sauces' should be 'sauces'; 'beetroot on the top of it' should be 'beetroot on top'; 'that is quite healthy' refers to the dish and should be 'which is quite healthy'.

× So instead of eating something oily food like piccados, I would definitely go with some healthier option.

✓ So instead of eating oily food like pakoras, I would definitely go with a healthier option.

'Something oily food' is incorrect; it should be 'oily food'. 'Piccados' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'pakoras'. 'Some healthier option' should be 'a healthier option' because 'option' is singular and countable.