零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法有错误，且表达不够连贯。建议注意时态和主谓一致，避免句子碎片，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed because I think eating helps relieve stress and relaxes me. Moreover, it cheers me up.

建議: 回答内容重复，且最后一句不完整。建议避免重复表达，使用连接词使句子完整且逻辑清晰。

範例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because most snacks contain a lot of sugar and fat, which can easily lead to weight gain and negatively affect health.

建議: 语法错误较多，句子不完整，表达不清晰。建议注意时态和句子结构，避免句子残缺，表达完整的观点。

範例: When I was a child, I usually didn't eat snacks because I preferred regular meals. I thought snacks would spoil my appetite and cause weight gain.

建議: 回答中有重复和语法错误，句子不完整。建议简洁表达，避免重复，使用完整句子说明原因。

範例: I like chocolate the most because it is sweet and contains substances that make me feel happy. I usually eat chocolate when I feel sad to cheer myself up.

× I usually eat snacks when I feel stressful because I think eating is a good way to relieve your stress and at the same time it will makes you relax.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed because I think eating is a good way to relieve your stress and at the same time it will make you relax.

这里的形容词应该是过去分词形式的"stressed"，表示感到压力，而不是现在分词"stressful"，后者表示具有压力的性质。"makes"应改为"make"，因为主语是"it"，后面是情态动词"will"，情态动词后动词用原形。

× It's a habit that can easily make you gain weight because there are a lot of sugar and fat in most of the snacks, so it will influence.

✓ It's a habit that can easily make you gain weight because there is a lot of sugar and fat in most of the snacks, so it will influence you.

"a lot of"后面接不可数名词时，谓语动词用单数形式，故"are"应改为"is"。另外，句尾"it will influence"缺少宾语，应补充宾语"you"。

× Normally I'm not eating snacks child because I usually eat regular meals and don't really like to eat snacks.

✓ Normally I didn't eat snacks as a child because I usually ate regular meals and didn't really like to eat snacks.

这里描述过去的习惯，应使用一般过去时，"I'm not eating"应改为"I didn't eat"，"usually eat"改为"usually ate"，"don't really like"改为"didn't really like"。另外，"child"前应加介词"as a"。

× I think it will affect my appetite to eat regular meals and gain weight so I.

✓ I think it will affect my appetite to eat regular meals and cause me to gain weight, so I avoid it.

原句结构不完整，缺少谓语和宾语，导致句意不清。应补充完整句子，使表达完整明确。

× I like chocolate the best because it's it's sweet and it contains the. Substance that makes me feel joyful and they cheer me up every time I feel sad or I I will eat chocolate.

✓ I like chocolate the best because it's sweet and it contains substances that make me feel joyful and cheer me up every time I feel sad or when I eat chocolate.

"it's it's"重复，应删去一个"it's"。"the. Substance"中间不应有句号，应连写为"the substance"或直接用复数"substances"。"they cheer me up"中的"they"指代不明，应改为"which"或省略。句尾"or I I will eat chocolate"重复，应改为"or when I eat chocolate"。