零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your sentences more concise and use linking words to improve coherence. For example, you can say: "I usually eat snacks like Iranian traditional ice cream in the evening because I often take a nap in the afternoon, and afterwards I feel hungry and want a sweet refreshment."

範例: I usually eat snacks like Iranian traditional ice cream in the evening because I often take a nap in the afternoon, and afterwards I feel hungry and want a sweet refreshment.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and clearer structure. Avoid repeating 'your body' and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say: "Eating snacks like chips or ice cream daily can be harmful; however, having them once a week is unlikely to damage your health or immune system."

範例: Eating snacks like chips or ice cream daily can be harmful; however, having them once a week is unlikely to damage your health or immune system.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and unclear pronoun references. Also, avoid redundancy and use linking words. For example: "Yes, I used to eat many snacks like chips and ice cream when I was young. My mother was often upset because she thought this habit was unhealthy, so she advised me to eat snacks in moderation."

範例: Yes, I used to eat many snacks like chips and ice cream when I was young. My mother was often upset because she thought this habit was unhealthy, so she advised me to eat snacks in moderation.

建議: Your answer provides good content but has grammatical mistakes and hesitations. Try to speak more fluently and use correct sentence structures. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh'. For example: "One of my favorite snacks is Iranian traditional ice cream, which contains milk, saffron, and other typical ice cream ingredients. I like it because it refreshes me and is good for my health."

範例: One of my favorite snacks is Iranian traditional ice cream, which contains milk, saffron, and other typical ice cream ingredients. I like it because it refreshes me and is good for my health.

× And also my mother was often upset with this habit because he thought it could be unhealthy for me and she advised me to do it in moderation.

✓ And also my mother was often upset with this habit because she thought it could be unhealthy for me and she advised me to do it in moderation.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect when referring to 'my mother', who is female. The correct pronoun is 'she'. Using the wrong pronoun causes confusion about the subject's gender.

× One of my favorite snacks is Iranian traditional ice cream with its ingredients are uh, milk and especially saffron and other materials of usual ice cream.

✓ One of my favorite snacks is Iranian traditional ice cream, whose ingredients are uh, milk and especially saffron and other materials of usual ice cream.

The phrase 'with its ingredients are' is grammatically incorrect. To correctly link the snack to its ingredients, 'whose ingredients are' should be used to indicate possession.

× I like this snack because it make me feel refreshed and it's good for me.

✓ I like this snack because it makes me feel refreshed and it's good for me.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Subject-verb agreement is necessary for grammatical correctness.