零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答表达了吃零食的频率和原因，但语法和表达不够自然，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和连词，使表达更流畅。

範例: I usually eat snacks twice a day because they help me relax when I'm studying hard.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，且缺乏具体细节。建议使用简单明了的句子，明确表达观点，并举例说明。

範例: No, I don't think snacks are healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and fat, which can harm our health.

建議: 回答较长且重复，语法错误较多，表达不够连贯。建议简洁回答，避免重复，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

範例: I didn't eat snacks often when I was young because my mother was strict and believed snacks were unhealthy for children.

建議: 回答表达了喜好，但语法和用词不够准确，且有口语填充词。建议去除多余词汇，使用正确的时态和表达方式。

範例: I really like chocolate-flavored cookies because they taste sweet and make me feel happy when I eat them.

× I do usually eat snacks at least twice a day because if let me feel relaxed while I'm struggling on studying.

✓ I usually do eat snacks at least twice a day because it lets me feel relaxed while I'm struggling with studying.

副词通常放在助动词之后或句首，'do usually'的顺序不正确，应改为 'usually do'。此外，句中 'if let me feel' 结构不完整，应改为 'it lets me feel'，并且 'struggling on studying' 应改为 'struggling with studying'，介词使用错误。

× I do usually eat snacks at least twice a day because if let me feel relaxed while I'm struggling on studying.

✓ I usually do eat snacks at least twice a day because it lets me feel relaxed while I'm struggling with studying.

动词 'struggle' 后应接介词 'with'，表示 '努力应对某事'，而不是 'on'。

× because if let me feel relaxed while I'm struggling on studying.

✓ because it lets me feel relaxed while I'm struggling with studying.

句中缺少主语，'if let me' 结构不完整，应补充主语 'it'，使句子完整。

× Of course not because snacks as a public thing which is unhealthy food because it really impacts our body health such as the agami, the cookies is not a really gain a positive impact to our body.

✓ Of course not because snacks are a common thing which is unhealthy food and they really impact our body health. For example, agami and cookies do not really have a positive impact on our body.

snacks 是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式 'are' 和 'impact'。此外，'the agami, the cookies is' 中 'is' 应改为 'are'，且 'gain a positive impact' 用法错误，应改为 'have a positive impact'。

× such as the agami, the cookies is not a really gain a positive impact to our body.

✓ such as agami and cookies do not really have a positive impact on our body.

在列举时，通常不加定冠词 'the'，除非特指某些特定的事物。此处应去掉 'the'。

× When I was young I didn't eat snacks at all because my mom was very strict on this kind of situation because she didn't want us have a habit to eat the snacks when we were young because it she really think that it's really unhealthy to us so we.

✓ When I was young, I didn't eat snacks at all because my mom was very strict about this. She didn't want us to develop a habit of eating snacks when we were young because she really thought it was unhealthy for us.

过去时态中，动词 'think' 应用过去式 'thought'，'want us have' 应改为 'want us to have'，动词不定式需要 'to'。此外，'strict on' 应改为 'strict about'，介词使用错误。

× my mom was very strict on this kind of situation

✓ my mom was very strict about this kind of situation

形容词 'strict' 后应接介词 'about'，表示对某事严格，而不是 'on'。

× because it she really think that it's really unhealthy to us so we.

✓ because she really thought it was really unhealthy for us.

句中 'it she' 多余，应去掉 'it'，且 'think' 应用过去式 'thought'，'unhealthy to us' 应改为 'unhealthy for us'。

× because it she really think that it's really unhealthy to us so we.

✓ because she really thought it was really unhealthy for us.

形容词 'unhealthy' 后应接介词 'for'，表示对某人不健康，而不是 'to'。

× Well, I'm a big fan of cookies, especially the flavour is chocolate flavour because uh, chocolate is made me feel so sweet and happy while I'm eating the cookies.

✓ Well, I'm a big fan of cookies, especially chocolate flavor because chocolate makes me feel so sweet and happy while I'm eating the cookies.

'the flavour is chocolate flavour' 结构重复且不自然，应简化为 'especially chocolate flavor'。'chocolate is made me feel' 语法错误，应改为 'chocolate makes me feel'，主谓不一致。