零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时应避免重复表达，如“I cannot, I can't help thinking of them”显得冗余。可以简化句子结构，使表达更自然流畅。同时，注意语法错误，如“desserts that contains”应为“desserts that contain”。

範例: I usually eat snacks before dinner because I feel hungry then. In the afternoon, I like sweet desserts with cream and sugar, even though I know they are not very healthy.

建議: 回答结构清晰，但语言表达略显重复，如“may, it might not so healthy”。建议使用更准确的表达，并增加连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: It depends on the type of snacks. For example, fruits and nuts are healthy because they contain many nutrients, but snacks high in sugar or cream are less healthy.

建議: 回答中时态使用不当，如“when I am in my primary school”应为过去时。此外，句子未完整结束，表达不完整。建议注意时态一致性并完整表达观点。

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was in primary school because I felt hungry after school. I usually bought snacks to cheer myself up and feel relaxed.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误，如“desserts that contains”应为“desserts that contain”。表达中有重复和犹豫词汇“it's it's”，“umm”，建议简化语言，增强表达的流畅性和准确性。

範例: I usually like sweet snacks, especially desserts with sugar and cream. Although I know they can cause weight gain, I still enjoy them. For example, I like chocolate.

× In the afternoon I always like to eat some sweet desserts that contains a lot of creams and sugar, although I know that's not so healthy, but I cannot, I can't help thinking of them.

✓ In the afternoon I always like to eat some sweet desserts that contain a lot of cream and sugar, although I know that's not so healthy, but I cannot, I can't help thinking of them.

这里的主语是复数形式的"desserts"，谓语动词应该用复数形式"contain"，而不是单数"contains"。另外，"cream"作为不可数名词，不需要复数形式。

× For example, if you are eating some fruits or nuts, it's quite healthy because it contains a lot of nutrients.

✓ For example, if you are eating some fruit or nuts, it's quite healthy because they contain a lot of nutrients.

"fruit"作为不可数名词时不加复数形式，且后文指代复数名词应使用复数代词"they"，谓语动词也应使用复数形式"contain"。

× I usually like to eat the sweet snacks, especially the desserts that contains a lot of sugar and cream.

✓ I usually like to eat sweet snacks, especially desserts that contain a lot of sugar and cream.

"desserts"为复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式"contain"。此外，"the sweet snacks"改为"sweet snacks"更自然。

× Yes, especially when I am in my primary school because I often felt hungry after school and I always bought some snacks for myself to eat, to cheer myself up and to make me feel more relaxed.

✓ Yes, especially when I was in primary school because I often felt hungry after school and I always bought some snacks for myself to eat, to cheer myself up and to make me feel more relaxed.

描述过去的时间点时，动词时态应使用过去时，"am"应改为过去时"was"。

× In the afternoon I always like to eat some sweet desserts that contains a lot of creams and sugar, although I know that's not so healthy, but I cannot, I can't help thinking of them.

✓ In the afternoon I always like to eat some sweet desserts that contain a lot of cream and sugar. Although I know that's not so healthy, I can't help thinking of them.

句中同时使用了"although"和"but"，造成连接词重复，应去掉其中一个，使句子更通顺。