零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding repetition and unnecessary words. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I usually eat snacks at night because I like to enjoy them while watching my favorite late-night TV show.

建議: Improve your sentence structure and vocabulary by using more natural expressions and linking words to explain your opinion clearly.

範例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy; however, I believe everyone deserves a treat occasionally to feel happier and enjoy life.

建議: Avoid repeating the same idea and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Also, try to be more concise and clear.

範例: When I was younger, I ate many snacks because I didn't know they were unhealthy.

建議: Use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide a clear description.

範例: I like pickles because they are delicious, salty, sour, low in calories, and crispy, which makes them very enjoyable to eat.

× I eat my snacks more often at night because I enjoy eating my snacks while watching my favorite TV show, which is late night.

✓ I eat my snacks more often at night because I enjoy eating my snacks while watching my favorite late-night TV show.

The phrase 'which is late night' is awkward and incorrect. The correct adjective form is 'late-night' to describe the TV show. This is an issue of correct adjective usage and phrase structure, improving clarity and naturalness.

× I do not think that is healthy to eat snacks, but I think we all deserve to treat in our day so that we can enjoy and feel happier.

✓ I do not think it is healthy to eat snacks, but I think we all deserve to treat ourselves during the day so that we can enjoy and feel happier.

The phrase 'deserve to treat in our day' is incorrect. The verb 'treat' requires an object, so 'treat ourselves' is correct. Also, 'in our day' should be 'during the day' for proper preposition use. This involves verb usage and preposition correction.

× I did eat a lot of snacks when I was younger because I did not have enough information about how bad the snacks for me so I was eating them so much when I was younger.

✓ I ate a lot of snacks when I was younger because I did not have enough information about how bad the snacks were for me, so I ate them a lot when I was younger.

The use of 'did eat' is unnecessary; simple past 'ate' is sufficient. Also, 'how bad the snacks for me' lacks a verb; it should be 'how bad the snacks were for me.' The phrase 'I was eating them so much' is better as 'I ate them a lot' for clarity and tense consistency.

× I like Pickles, I think that it's very delicious snacks 'cause it's salty, sour and low calorie snacks so I really enjoy eating it and it's crispy at the same time.

✓ I like pickles; I think they are very delicious snacks because they are salty, sour, and low-calorie, so I really enjoy eating them and they are crispy at the same time.

'Pickles' is plural, so pronouns and verbs should agree in number: 'they are' instead of 'it's.' Also, 'delicious snacks' is plural, so 'it' should be 'them.' This is a singular and plural agreement issue affecting pronouns and verbs.