零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains redundancy and grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and natural by avoiding repeated words and improving sentence structure. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I usually eat snacks only on special occasions like weddings, festivals, or when I host a party for my sister. Otherwise, I avoid snacks because I am health conscious and worry about the unhealthy oils often used in them.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but is incomplete and has grammatical mistakes. Try to complete your thoughts clearly, use proper tenses, and link your ideas logically. Avoid vague phrases and be specific about why homemade snacks are healthier.

範例: I don't think eating snacks regularly is healthy. However, homemade snacks are better because we use fresh ingredients that are less harmful. In contrast, store-bought snacks often contain unhealthy additives and oils.

建議: Your answer has many grammatical errors and repetitions, which affect clarity. Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid repeating words. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was younger. Although my parents warned me about eating too many, I enjoyed sharing snacks with my friends regularly.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to be more specific about the snacks you like and explain why, using correct grammar and linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: I like many types of snacks, but I especially enjoy those that children usually eat. For example, fried potatoes have always been one of my favorites since childhood.

× Now well I prefer to eat snacks only on such a special occasions like wedding, festivals or whenever or when whenever I throw a party for my sister at home then I prefer to eat her snacks.

✓ Now, well, I prefer to eat snacks only on special occasions like weddings, festivals, or whenever I throw a party for my sister at home; then I prefer to eat her snacks.

The phrase 'such a special occasions' is incorrect because 'occasions' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'wedding' should be pluralized to 'weddings' to match the plural 'occasions'. The sentence is also improved by removing redundant words and adding proper punctuation for clarity.

× Now well I prefer to eat snacks only on such a special occasions like wedding, festivals or whenever or when whenever I throw a party for my sister at home then I prefer to eat her snacks.

✓ Now, well, I prefer to eat snacks only on special occasions like weddings, festivals, or whenever I throw a party for my sister at home; then I prefer to eat her snacks.

The phrase 'eat her snacks' is ambiguous and could be misinterpreted. It is better to clarify that the snacks belong to the sister by saying 'eat the snacks she prepares' or 'eat her snacks' if contextually clear. In this correction, it is kept as 'her snacks' assuming context is clear.

× Otherwise I just avoided it because I am very health conscious and I do not want to take any type of risk from such a oil that are mainly used by others in it.

✓ Otherwise, I just avoid it because I am very health conscious and I do not want to take any type of risk from the kind of oil that is mainly used by others in it.

The phrase 'take any type of risk from such a oil' is incorrect because 'oil' is uncountable and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'such a oil' should be 'such oil' or 'the kind of oil'. The verb 'are' should be 'is' to agree with the singular noun 'oil'. The sentence is also improved by changing 'avoided' to 'avoid' to maintain present tense consistent with 'am' and 'do not want'.

× Well, no, I didn't think so that it quite healthy to eat snacks on a regular basis.

✓ Well, no, I don't think that it is quite healthy to eat snacks on a regular basis.

The original sentence uses past tense 'didn't think' which conflicts with the present context of the question. Changing to present tense 'don't think' and 'is' makes the sentence grammatically correct and contextually appropriate.

× But if I talk about such a snacks that is usually we are made at home that is quite healthy for us because in this we are using such a ingredients that will not harm to our health.

✓ But if I talk about snacks that are usually made at home, they are quite healthy for us because we use ingredients that will not harm our health.

The phrase 'such a snacks' is incorrect because 'snacks' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Similarly, 'such a ingredients' is incorrect because 'ingredients' is plural. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Moreover, whatever the snacks we are eat usually from outside that are really harmful for it.

✓ Moreover, the snacks we usually eat from outside are really harmful to us.

The phrase 'whatever the snacks we are eat' is incorrect; 'are eat' is ungrammatical. It should be 'we usually eat'. Also, 'harmful for it' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'harmful to us'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Suddenly, yes, I vividly remember that I had eat such snacks on regularly basis when I was a younger and I also remember that my parents was calling to me on such a on such a things again and again.

✓ Suddenly, yes, I vividly remember that I ate such snacks on a regular basis when I was younger, and I also remember that my parents were calling me about such things again and again.

The phrase 'had eat' is incorrect; the past tense of 'eat' is 'ate'. 'On regularly basis' should be 'on a regular basis'. 'I was a younger' should be 'I was younger'. 'My parents was' should be 'my parents were'. 'Calling to me on such a on such a things' is awkward and corrected to 'calling me about such things'.

× But beside all these things I I eat eat and I really enjoy it with my friends also by sharing it.

✓ But despite all these things, I ate and really enjoyed it with my friends by sharing it.

The phrase 'I I eat eat' is repetitive and incorrect; it should be 'I ate'. 'Enjoy it' should be in past tense 'enjoyed' to match the past context. 'Beside' should be 'despite'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Well, every type of snacks I prefer, I really likes to eat it.

✓ Well, I prefer every type of snack; I really like to eat them.

'Every type of snacks' is incorrect because 'every' is followed by singular noun 'type' and 'snack' should be singular. 'I really likes' is incorrect; it should be 'I really like'. 'It' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'snacks'.

× But most of the times I prefer to eat such snacks which was mainly usually eat by a small children and moreover, I had also experienced such type of things in my childhood.

✓ But most of the time, I prefer to eat snacks that are mainly usually eaten by small children, and moreover, I also experienced such things in my childhood.

'Most of the times' should be 'most of the time'. 'Which was mainly usually eat' is incorrect; it should be 'that are mainly usually eaten'. 'A small children' is incorrect; 'children' is plural and does not take 'a'. 'Had also experienced' is changed to 'also experienced' to maintain simple past tense consistent with the context.

× Let me take an example of myself.

✓ Let me give an example from my own experience.

The phrase 'take an example of myself' is awkward and unidiomatic. A better expression is 'give an example from my own experience'.

× I eat a eat a fried potatoes.

✓ I eat fried potatoes.

The phrase 'a eat a fried potatoes' is incorrect and repetitive. 'Potatoes' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. The corrected sentence removes redundancy and article misuse.

× It was one of my favorite.

✓ It was one of my favorites.

The phrase 'one of my favorite' is incomplete; it should be 'one of my favorites' to indicate one item among several favorites.